Uncyclopedia:VFH/High school football players of Indian descent

Article: High school football players of Indian descent	Score: 4.5 alien presences on the field
Nominated by:	Aleister
For: 11.5	For. This page by ICameHereInACloche (or ICame for short) could have easily won the Happy Monkey contest, but was a distant second, well, at least second, to a totally incomprehensible article. A fantastic job of writing, and writing on a limited slice of a topic. Very nice work. Aleister 7:48 26-2-'12 For. EpicAwesomeness (talk) 08:33, February 26, 2012 (UTC) For. Yeah sure ~Sir Frosty (Talk to me!) 09:14, February 26, 2012 (UTC) For. RegularUndies . 10:17, February 26, 2012 (UTC) For. Oh yes, this one's awesome! Mattsnow 10:50, February 26, 2012 (UTC) For. Is this a hot topic in the USA? Is this about football or another game?? A feature all the same. *RomArtusImperator ® (Orate) 17:19, February 26, 2012 (UTC) For. —Sir Socky** (talk) (stalk) GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 14:53, 27 February 2012 For. ChiefjusticePS2 19:03, February 27, 2012 (UTC) For. Nice :D 77.114.190.160 20:11, February 27, 2012 (UTC) For. -- Lost Labyrinth • (t) • (c) • (a) 21:55, February 27, 2012 (UTC) I am amused. -- Sir Xam Ralco the Mediocre 03:27, February 28, 2012 (UTC) For.. That is just too funny! Great job! Dave From Mars (SPEAK!)
Against: 7	Against. Just not for me. Pup 01:24 27 Feb '12 13:24, February 27, 2012 (UTC) Shab's got the good points TKFU U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U UU U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U CK 18:23, February 27, 2012 (UTC) Against. I'm with Shabidoo. The article's tone feels rushed and unfocused, and the ending just felt stamped on; it did nothing for the actual article. All the insulting just felt stale and trite. CameHereInACloche (Talk) 21:22, February 27, 2012 (UTC) Against. Although a good article in the time it was written, I feel it lacks polish, esp. in tone department. Knucmo2 (talk) 16:19, March 2, 2012 (UTC) Some very funny lines but the tone is a bit all over the place and the ending is weak. A little more work is all it needs. --Black Flamingo 11:17, March 8, 2012 (UTC) Just too wordy for me. The word-to-laugh ratio is much too high. pillow talk 18:05, March 12, 2012 (UTC) Against. Mr N 19:12, Mar 16
Comments	This article certainly deserved a high place in the happy monkey competition, but I think its a few easy edits away from a feature. The tone of the article seems to bounce back and forth between calm ranting and then hysterical insults and racist trashing without any real justification for it nor an explanation behind the bi polarity (we only have a clue as to why at the very end). And the ultimate climax, as it is, seemed to come out of nowhere and didn't resolve any of the ideas in the article. Sorry. --ShabiDOO 18:14, February 27, 2012 (UTC)