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| Article: B.O.X.
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Score: 2
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Sir Oliphaunte (განხილვა)  21:56, March 1, 2012 (UTC)
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For: 5
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- I think it's good. Obviously no one cares what I think, especially me, so let me know what you think. --Sir Oliphaunte (განხილვა) 21:56, March 1, 2012 (UTC)
 For. And my thoughts at the moment are "Mmm... boobs." —Sir Socky   (talk) (stalk)  GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 00:06, 2 March 2012- For. I like it Funnybony
   12:48, Mar 3 12:48, March 3, 2012 (UTC)
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 Mattsnow 15:41, March 4, 2012 (UTC)
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 TKFU UUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK  22:32, March 4, 2012 (UTC)
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Against: 3
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- I don't find it all that funny. Sorry. --
 Sir Xam Ralco the Mediocre 23:01, March 2, 2012 (UTC)
- I think the writing is a little too loose for my taste. There's some strange word choices and unusual sentence structures going on.
 pillow talk 18:03, March 12, 2012 (UTC)
 Not yet. The opening is very strong, but then the rest of the article feels dangerously like filler. You could probably halve the length and make some of the jokes snappier - instead of going into detailed accounts of American/Soviet espionage, specific of uses of the BOX, etc., you could reference them in a sentence or two. Also, the line "[B.O.X.] was somehow always a good cover for agents, even in spaces one would never expect to see a fresh box of oranges" basically just explains the joke. – Sir Skullthumper, MD (criticize • writings • critchat) 21:47 Mar 12, 2012
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- Comment. This starts off utterly helarious. I laughed out loud twice in the introduction, except the last few sentences which I feel are duds. The rest of the article then kind of bombed in my opinion. Is there any way to make the rest of the article as funn as the intro? ShabiDOO 00:01, March 2, 2012 (UTC)
- No. --Sir Oliphaunte (განხილვა) 01:46, March 2, 2012 (UTC)
- Seriously though, yea probably. What specifically don't you like? It's always a problem for me to find out what I should cut in the middle sections of my articles. Also, you misspelled hilarious. Just my daily nag right there, you can ignore me. --Sir Oliphaunte (განხილვა) 01:47, March 2, 2012 (UTC)
- Your daily nag has helped me with my coloquial english writing, it is very appreciated! Can I get back to you soon? I could do a mini pee if you are interested. --ShabiDOO 01:50, March 2, 2012 (UTC)
- Yea, any help is appreciated. Take you time, of course. --Sir Oliphaunte (განხილვა) 02:53, March 2, 2012 (UTC)
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21:56, March 1, 2012 (UTC)
For. And my thoughts at the moment are "Mmm... boobs." 
Not yet. The opening is very strong, but then the rest of the article feels dangerously like filler. You could probably halve the length and make some of the jokes snappier - instead of going into detailed accounts of American/Soviet espionage, specific of uses of the BOX, etc., you could reference them in a sentence or two. Also, the line "[B.O.X.] was somehow always a good cover for agents, even in spaces one would never expect to see a fresh box of oranges" basically just explains the joke. 
