Uncyclopedia:VFH/Worst Day on my Computer

Article: Worst Day on my Computer	Score: -4 Annoying error signs
Nominated by:	If you're 555 then I'm Talk What's it like to be a heretic? 05:58, July 21, 2010 (UTC)
For: 2	Nom and For Best work I've done since Ol Red and HowTo:Date an Emo Girl. Don't die laughing after reading it! Cheers--If you're 555 then I'm Talk What's it like to be a heretic? 05:58, July 21, 2010 (UTC) FETAL ERROR. Megaman126512 06:55, July 21, 2010 (UTC)
Against: 6	Against. There's a very, very good article in here somewhere. Some parts are absolutely brilliant, like the break-up, but right now it suffers from some pretty glaring grammar errors (such as the frequent misuse of "your," especially in the computer's lines), and slapstick/mayhem finales that just fall flat. TKFU U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U UU U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U CK 08:31, July 21, 2010 (UTC) Against. I'm in agreement with TKF here. Sort out the grammar and I'll change my vote. Rabbi Techno kvetch Contribs FOXES 08:32, July 21, 2010 (UTC) Against. Per the above - I like the idea and some of the parts, but it just doesn't add up as a whole right now. Be ruthless - trim it down to the good bits, and fix the grammar. --UU - natter 08:53, Jul 21 Against. What they said. ~ Apheori shifty eyes (talk) (stalk) -- 20100721 - 18:15 (UTC) Pull it back to work on it Voting here just to get it from VFH to a medical care facility, where it can be worked on and then return here. IWKY asked me to look at it, and HELPME has helped it, and some specialists have been called in from the Mayo Word Clinic, and this fine article should be on its feet in no time. Aleister 18:31 21 7 Against. Honestly, I think there are just too many error messages, some of them aren't funny, and often the article twists itself into weird shapes to fit the pictures intead of the pictures illustrating the article. pillow talk 19:56, July 21, 2010 (UTC)
Comments	Since this is a self-nom, instead of instantly invalidating this, I'll just put the link to the pee review here and remind you to include it next time. Also, I agree with the pee review in two parts: cut out the parts that aren't so good and keep it briefer, and also consider changing the title (which you can do by moving the page, as opposed to the reviewer's ludicrous suggestions). That said, I'm a fan of the introduction. -- TKFU U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U UU U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U CK 08:35, July 21, 2010 (UTC) Comment. I proofread this a little bit, but I don't how to change the grammar on the images.--Sir HELPME Talk (more? --> CUN ROTM NOTM Pleb USS Pees SK ) On Wednesday, 06:29, July 21 2010 UTC