Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Erudition

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Erudition[edit source]

Just made a self-referential article around posh speech ('erudition' in posh speech). However, it just doesn't pack the punch of other self-referential articles like Incomprehensibility or AAAAAA!. Why is that and how can I make improvements?

P.S. Please hover your mouse over every link. A lot of jokes are hidden that way. Hipponias (talk) 08:23, 9 September 2020 (UTC)

While I do not have sufficent competence to do a full review, I'd say it looks good, and is at least a 40/50. @MrX: for more info. Gale5050 Complain about me! 01:00, 13 September 2020 (UTC)
Quick thought: this article is great! As for the pee review, I'd be happy to do it, but since I just did one for another article by Hipponias, I wanna wait a bit and see if someone else will do this one. That way Hipponias can get a different perspective on this. MrX blow me Emoji-drool.gif 16:14, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
@MrX: you can still do it, but I'll ping User: Zombiebaron, User: Cat the Colourful, User: Cassie and User: Y. If you don't mind, can you do 1 of my pee reviews? [1] [2] [3]? Gale5050 Complain about me! 20:30, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
Yes, I know that I'm allowed to do it, but I'd prefer to wait and see if someone else will. MrX blow me Emoji-drool.gif 20:52, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
@Cat the Colourful: interested in a review? Gale5050 Complain about me! 20:57, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
Humour: 8 Personally, it's not my taste, but I do know others will find it funny. Therefore, this gets an "8" in humor.
Concept: 6 Personally, it's developing. It's gonna need a lot more work, as it's basically a dead end, but in it's current state it's not bad, either.
Prose and formatting: 4 Now this is where my biggest concern is. The readable prose size is 3,084 bytes, and it only has 496 words. It also only has 2 sections. Yes, this is longer then most of my articles I am working on, where prose is an issue, which is why we get better. Seeing as this is one of your earlier articles, I understand why the prose is not great. Please, please, please, come back and fix more of the formatting
Images: 5 Image is meh, nothing good or bad to say. However, it could use another image
Miscellaneous: 5.75 Nothing more to say, just rounding up the average of what I previously gave you.
Final Score: 28.75 In short, its pretty funny, but the concept needs to be improved, the prose needs severe work, and you need more and funnier images. I hope you can do it. Good luck!
Reviewer: --Gale5050 complain about me! And see my Wikipedia contributions! 16:05, 24 January 2021 (UTC)