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Babyfacenc 06:53, 18 August 2009 (UTC) HEEEELP~! noob alert

I'll review this one. MacManiasig.png MacManiasig-cheerios.png MacManiasig-holmes.png MacManiasig-starwars.png MacManiasig-firefly.png MacManiasig-pixar.png MacManiasig-oregon.png MacManiasig-lesmiz.png MacManiasig-doctor.png HalLogo.png Portal16px.png UncycLensFlare16px.pngDalek16px.png ChekhovSig.pngJapanSig.png Sir MacMania GUN[11:49 18 Aug 2009]
Humour: 2 OK, since you are very new to Uncyc, I would give you some advice about Reviews: for the first few articles, pay more attention to the comments than you do to the scores. In fact, always pay more attention to the comments. I assume you would do that, however, since you appear to be reading this.

Moving on to the actual article, there is not a lot of content to review. The content that is there is interesting, but I think you should certainly expound more upon the content. Personally, I do not know how I would go about this, since I typically don't write about this sort of stuff. However, it would be advisable to stay away from overly vulgar content that could put off the reader. Right now there does not seem to be such a problem; however, just be careful not to cause it while expanding the article. Also, the general consensus appears to be that you should read UN:How you might go about writing something that is funny, rather than writing something that is stupid, which would of course in no way imply that you are stupid, although if you are, we mean no offense (more conveniently known as UN:HTBFANJS).

Concept: 4 This is certainly a recognisable subject with an interesting concept behind it. While I am almost sure I have heard this sort of idea outside of Uncyc, nevertheless it is an interesting one. As I previously mentioned, there is a lot of room for expansion here. As silly as it may sound, you could try writing about the origins, history, control and legacy in different sections.

You could also try and look at featured versions of articles via UN:BEST.

Prose and formatting: 7 I can't fault you a lot on prose, since I don't see many technical errors. You may want to revisit how you use parentheses, though. The only other comment I have is that you may want to categorise your articles by adding something like [[Category:Bingle Bongle Dingle Dangle Yickety-Doo Yickety-Dah Ping Pong Lippy Tappy Too Tah]] (NB: not a real category; substitute your choices). The only other other comment I have is that you will probably want to add relevant links as well as irrelevant links (but use the latter in moderation).
Images: 0 A lack of images is often fatal for an Uncyc entry. You will need images. I do not know, however, what the level of tolerance regarding vulgar images are. You may wish to look up articles on similar subjects to gauge what images tend to be okay, or you could ask your local administrator.
Miscellaneous: 2 There is far more potential that can be exploited regarding this subject. Your idea of, er, bodily control is an interesting one, but the humour latent in that idea should be expanded and beaten to the point of insanity insane laughter.
Final Score: 15 Don't be discouraged! Work on the article! Add some images, add a bunch of links, and most importantly, add a lot of content—and I mean a lot—but also pay attention to UN:HTBFANJS. If you put some effort into it, you could have an interesting article. Welcome to Uncyc!
Reviewer: MacManiasig.png MacManiasig-cheerios.png MacManiasig-holmes.png MacManiasig-starwars.png MacManiasig-firefly.png MacManiasig-pixar.png MacManiasig-oregon.png MacManiasig-lesmiz.png MacManiasig-doctor.png HalLogo.png Portal16px.png UncycLensFlare16px.pngDalek16px.png ChekhovSig.pngJapanSig.png Sir MacMania GUN[13:31 18 Aug 2009]