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Whatcha thinking about?[edit source]
Horace Donald Westenchester 20:07, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
hey man im really really sorry but you better get somone else to do this one, cause i think that this is one of the best articles i've ever read (much better than i could ever do any way). And i don't think i could go in depth cause theres nothing wrong with it at all, all i would be able to say is its perfect. so sorry i can't do it but good luck on any future articles (i wish i could time travel into the future just to read them(: )
P.S. I'm going to nominate this article to be on the front page thnx --Magic man 23:02, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
- Nice, I've been waiting for this one to move along. The best of Horace's work, not counting the Nigga' page. Aleister 17:57 14 7
- Err... I just reviewed this article, and it's placed it on the 'reviewed' section, but the review isn't showing up below for me. If it isn't for you either, just edit this page, and the review is there. It just doesn't seem to be showing up for me. --Some Idiot
10:59, July 16, 2010 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8 | I really like this article. It's full of good humour and makes me laugh quite a few times. The thing is - I don't think there's anything you should change on this article, humour wise. I think it's pretty much perfect how it is. The only thing that strikes me is that the introduction doesn't fit in. I think you should move this article and make it an UnBook. This way that intro would fit in, and besides, this is not an article ABOUT that phrase (explaining it's history and such) but rather telling a story with 'Watcha thinking about?' as it's main theme. But other then changing this I think this is a very humorous article. |
| Concept: | 7 | This is a good, but not overly fabulous concept. However you've squeezed out everything you can with this subject, and I think you've done well. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | You consistently kept your tone and style of prose the same. At points you seem to waffle on about unimportant things, so maybe cut out some of the non-important stuff. I couldn't spot any significant spelling errors, so that was okay as well. One thing I want to say here is that you should make the first paragraph separate from the rest. labeling it 'The Normal Thing' or something. Then make the rest of the paragraphs part of a different section, because they're actually telling us about specific dates when you tried different strategies You may label this section as 'Other Strategies' or anything catchier you can think of. |
| Images: | 7 | Pretty good pictures, as each links with their own paragraph. I recommend moving the CD to the first paragraph when you tell the truth. This is more a formatting thing and will just make it look better. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.5 | What I would give your article overall |
| Final Score: | 37.5 | I see this is on VFH. I've already voted for it, and I hope it gets on. Just change this to an UnBook, do a few things with the formatting and this should be a near-perfect article. I don't really have any suggestions for the humor because I don't see anything you could really improve. One of my favourite articles, and I hope this was helpful as I am new to Peeing. |
| Reviewer: | --Some Idiot  10:57, July 16, 2010 (UTC)
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