Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnScripts:Noah's Ark
UnScripts:Noah's Ark[edit source]
Sir Ljlego, GUN VFH FIYC WotM SG WHotM PWotM AotM EGAEDM ANotM + (Talk) 20:59, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8 | Wherever possible, the humor should be more extreme. For example,
There were also some truly lol moments in there. What made me laugh hardest was:
Nice work. | |||
| Concept: | 8 | Making fun of the Bible isn't exactly original, but this doesn't make fun of religion so much as it is simply a funny version of a Bible story, which keeps it fresh. | |||
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | End all of your sentences with punctuation, for consistency. I found one minor spelling error. | |||
| Images: | 8 | Obviously, there's only one, but it is quite effective as a summary of the article. However, an image or two more couldn't hurt. | |||
| Miscellaneous: | 7.75 | Average'd! | |||
| Final Score: | 38.75 | Overall very good, and VFHable with a few minor changes. | |||
| Reviewer: | -- §. | WotM | PLS | T | C | A 02:57, 24 February 2008 (UTC) | ||||
Additional comments per request:
Well, to be honest, I don't have a whole load to add here. It's a good article. I laughed. I did, however, pine for more pictures - the one you have is good and so forth, but after that, it's a lot of white page with text and nothing to break it up. How's about a house with a dirty great boat out the back for starters? By my calculations you need at least another 2-3 good images, or 4-5 OK-ish in a decent light ones.
I made a couple of minor spelling type tweaks because I'm kinda sad like that, but this is the kind of thing I hate - an article I have few suggestions to improve. Darn you, I'll look like I'm losing my touch! Tell you what - let me know when you've added a few more pics, and I'll give it the nom it should deserve at that point. Unless, of course, you're not interested in a nom...
Oh, and I can confirm it is definitely not pants. --SirU.U.Esq. VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 22:14, Feb 25