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UnNews:My testicle might have partially detached[edit source]
I just wanna see how this does. -- Kip the Egg 
Talk Works 12:17, Feb. 15, 2011
| Humour: | 7 | If toilet humor was what you were attempting to do, this article easily succeeds. References to masturbation, the story of the wear and tear your balls suffered through the years, all adds up to some fine bad taste humor. However, it is in bad taste, so while it may be funny for your target audience, it is also likely to put off others, and hence lacks universal appeal. However, since the only way to fix that is redoing the article from scratch (or probably getting rid of it) I simply suggest you add some more endearing stories about your balls. Also, what if it did end up hurting after all? I know from personal experience that these balls can be a huge pain in the crotch at times, maybe you should add a line or two about how bad you think it's gonna hurt if your testicle does get detached. |
| Concept: | 7 | Like a said, this is a simple bad taste article. The humor is pretty crude, and ballsy, but I'm suspecting that was your intention, so I'll say nothing more than keep it up. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | Frankly, this reads more like an essay than an UnNews piece. News articles are usually written from a third-person point of view, and they at least pretend to be neutral and unbiased. I know that you're describing an event here, but the style you've written it in will never qualify as news. I suggest you move it to the Editorial section, or simply remove the UnNews tag and make this a standalone article. |
| Images: | 8 | Nice sketch of the testicle and the hands over there. The caption "Something's wrong. Those are not my hands" had me in splits. The image under the "Source" header was also very cheesy and nicely done. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7 | What it's worth, in my opinion. |
| Final Score: | 34 | Overall, a well-written toilet humor article. I think it does a good job of what it was trying to do, which was to crack below-the-belt jokes about testicle damage and masturbation. In bad taste, and won't be liked by everybody, but if that's what you want, go ahead, knock yourself out! |
| Reviewer: | --Scofield 16:01, February 28, 2011 (UTC) | |