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This Page Is On Fire[edit source]
This page is a bit (well I say a "bit"...I mean a lot) random. I guess it either works or it doesn't... Thanks in advance. - 19:00 4 May Sir FSt. (QotF BFF NotM) YTTE
| Humour: | 9 | It works for me. A couple of suggestions however: I would get rid of this section: "You might even get an electric shock on the way, while you scroll down, that would be ironic! I would laugh, I WOULD LAUGH!" because I feel it detracts from the page. Also, I'm not sure it is such a good idea to repeat the same warnings over and over. Perhaps something like "This page constitutes a fire hazard due to the fact that it is ON FIRE"; "Touching this page with any part of your anatomy may cause a burning sensation - this is called burning." Something like that. Repetition kind of suggests that you are not very imaginative. I'd also remove the bit about abusing {{USERNAME}}, but that's just me. The bit about herrings is quite weak, try two include a little more about herrings before you give up. |
| Concept: | 10 | Genius! I was just thinking the other day, "we don't have enough articles about things that are on fire." You have answered our prayers. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | One issue I have with this articles is the repetition of the pictures leading to large amounts of ugly whitespace (which is grey). Try to incorporate them within the boxes if you can. I also fixed a couple of typos and stuff, though I may have missed some. |
| Images: | 9 | Again, excellent, especially the one with the bus. The speeding sign isn't strictly relevant. It may be better if you had one (1) more picture of something on fire. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.5 | Averaged. |
| Final Score: | 43.5 | A very funny page. Good work. |
| Reviewer: | -- on the ball Ape (clapperclaw) (Riot Porn) 20:34, 4 May 2008 (UTC) | |