Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/The Pointlessness (band) (in-depth)
The Pointlessness (band) [edit source]
I want to improve this, but I'm out of inspiration. Any help or suggestions are welcome.
I'd like an in-depth review, preferably by a PEEING member. Also, since Tagstit and Guildensternenstein recently reviewed one of my articles, I'd like someone else to do the review this time. Anybody is still welcome to comment on the article ofcourse.
Please notice that this article is not really finished, I recently replaced the construction tag with {{Little Article}}. Keep this in mind when judging the article. I'm not expecting a "good" score, but I'don't want the score to be bad just because it's not done yet. -Sockpuppet of an unregistered user 12:23, 7 March 2009 (UTC)
- Bleh. I'm sorry Socky, but I have to take this template down - I've enough things on Uncyc keeping me beat. I just want to complete the current projects then go home. --
-kun "whisper sweet nothings into thine ear..." 19:13, 10 March 2009 (UTC)
- Okay then. No problem. -Sockpuppet of an unregistered user 19:20, 10 March 2009 (UTC)
- Hey there Sockpuppet. I remeber you from my Barrel Roll article. I was just wondering, how do I review your article? Do I just write the score next to the hScore and the comment In the Hcomment? It might seem like a stupid question to you, and I'm sorry if you think that but it's kind of my first time reviewing so I just want to make sure i'm doing everything right...I don't want the website to crash or anything (o.o)--Johnrofl123 03:04, 12 March 2009 (UTC)Johnrofl123
- Um, I doubt you are a PEEING member. -Sockpuppet of an unregistered user 16:16, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
- I know that, but I still want to help people with improving their articles...If you don't want me to review it than that's fine.---Johnrofl123 01:55, 13 March 2009 (UTC)Johnrofl123
- You're welcome to give me some advise on how I should improve the article, though I'd like a PEEING member to do this in-depth review. -Sockpuppet of an unregistered user 19:47, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
- I'm not a PEEING member, though the few reviews I've done have always been in-depth. If you doubt me, you can always check with Dad who originally got me into it, I doubt he'll kill me if I list him as a reference for my potty habits... Just lemme know if you think I'm pissy enough ;) -- Luverly - (Contribs) (Talk)
Grammar Nazi, Mum , BFF & NotM, CUN , GMP . - Perkele! 18:16, 15 Mar
- I'm not a PEEING member, though the few reviews I've done have always been in-depth. If you doubt me, you can always check with Dad who originally got me into it, I doubt he'll kill me if I list him as a reference for my potty habits... Just lemme know if you think I'm pissy enough ;) -- Luverly - (Contribs) (Talk)
- You're welcome to give me some advise on how I should improve the article, though I'd like a PEEING member to do this in-depth review. -Sockpuppet of an unregistered user 19:47, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
- I know that, but I still want to help people with improving their articles...If you don't want me to review it than that's fine.---Johnrofl123 01:55, 13 March 2009 (UTC)Johnrofl123
- Um, I doubt you are a PEEING member. -Sockpuppet of an unregistered user 16:16, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 2.5 | I could be evil, but it doesn't currently come off as much else than slightly amusing to me. The “it” is missing. However I'll give you a thumbs up and 0.5 points for the repetiteveness. However I'll give you a thumbs up and 0.5 points for the repetiteveness. It's actually something that in it's simplicity gets amusing. |
| Concept: | 3 | It took me the effort of actually bothering to eye my way through what the wikipedia article you linked you to was about to figure out the context for the article and where your idea for it is coming from. The secret society bit is not exactly the most logical, or possibly even amusing bit about the article... It seems unnecessary and forced.
How about alleged lip-syncing for a new section, btw? You said you're lacking ideas. Rumours concerning underaged girls, sex, drugs, rock'n'roll, rehab, uncertainty about the identity of the actual band members, official statistics of how many people actually bother going to their gigs? You can work it, even without the cabal! :) |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | Coherent, relatively well written. The formatting and layout in itself is a good start, and very few complaints about it exist. The censored bit relates to my concern above as comes to the whole secret society thing. It's not funny, unless there is some more flesh on the bones, and even then, that flesh can end up being putrid, so be careful... |
| Images: | 5 | The one image in the article sorta doesn't say much, but you have some. How about going on with the blacked out theme and using pictures of people with the black bars over their eyes for “alleged/suspected” members of the band? Something like that. Or an “artefact” with a signed guitar or whatever :P |
| Miscellaneous: | 4.6 | For a stump of an article that's still a WIP, I think it's not bad, just very much less funny than this site could allow for at the moment. How about trying to talk someone into helping you figure out something to elaborate the article with?
I'm sure that someone might volunteer on the article's talk page, if you present your dilemma and what you may or may not need. Might take a while, but seems like that happens often enough :) |
| Final Score: | 23.1 | I know this is a work in progress, and I hope at least some feedback is helpful, I've included ideas as they popped into my head while thinking about the reviewing bit. :)
*hugs* |
| Reviewer: | -- Luverly - (Contribs) (Talk)   Grammar Nazi, Mum , BFF & NotM, CUN , GMP . - Perkele! 14:35, 18 Mar
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