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My mommy

I think it's perfect as is. Feel free to tell me wrong. --MegaPleb • Dexter111344 • Complain here 00:51, 30 March 2009 (UTC)

By the way, this is a high priority article. Cause I said so. It needs a review as soon as possible. --MegaPleb • Dexter111344 • Complain here 00:58, 30 March 2009 (UTC)

Humour:	5	First thing's first. I'm not partial to the whole "joke" here, since it's one of those things that's overdone. Other than the main joke, your other, smaller jokes seemed rather weak to me. Perhaps you could do something different with the theme of this article, because I can't really see anything more you can do with the article in its current state.
Concept:	8.5	The concept is pretty good, If you chose a different theme I think this could have some serious potential.
Prose and formatting:	9	Since this article was meant to have terrible, childish prose and there are no errors beyong the ones intended, Good marks.
Images:	8	Your pictures were all good, except for the last one, which was rather pointless, and didn't really add much to the article.
Miscellaneous:	5	I Really think I need to reiterate the fact that the main joke here is overdone and not especially funny in the first place. I know this article could be good if you changed the joke, and I know that would require a serious rewrite, but I think if you want this to be a VFH you'll need to.
Final Score:	35.5	I think I've gone over all my concerns in the main body of the review, so I'll take this space to wish you good luck with this article.
Reviewer:	Gas Pump

Thanks, now could I have a more in-depth review, maybe by a registered user? --MegaPleb • Dexter111344 • Complain here 23:54, 30 March 2009 (UTC) Sorry, MY home computer doesn't save my username whenever I close IE. Gas Pump 01:21, 31 March 2009 (UTC)}}