Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Good Old Days
Good Old Days[edit source]
I rewrote some sections of this article and added some more. Pirate Lord__Sonic80 (Yell • Latest literary excretion) __ 02:10, August 2, 2010 (UTC)
Ok ill actually do thise one. I don't know what the rules are, but give me a day, two tops. --Happymonkey39 Dah Meme Master 05:59, August 2, 2010 (UTC) Booking cleared, anyone can do this one now. --ChiefjusticeDS 09:17, August 9, 2010 (UTC)
Ok this is way overdue...and i got banned for not doing this so i guess i really should get cracking... --Happymonkey39 Dah Meme Master 23:56, August 14, 2010 (UTC)
Humour: | 8 | Before I begin I must simply say, congratulations. There are two things I usually hate in articles. One is that there is too much information thus having no humor. The other is when people mention nazi..since I'm jewish. But you my friend had both and yet still made me laugh!
Now of course, there were still problems, and the truth is that there was too much info, but somehow you did get humor in there. Heres a breakdown to make it easier for you. Intro
Copeting Theories of Old Day-related Goodness
What Made those days better than these days?
Death of the good ol'days
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Concept: | 9 | GREAT JOB! In most cases, people don't seem to take advantage of their articles name...thus meaning, bad job. You did take advantage of it big time. Now the main thing you are missing is something i thought was obvious...when i was a boy.
When i was a boy is a very famous line among elderly people. And it's quite similar to the good old days in fact it is the good old days to them. You should have made reference to this line many times. Hell, that could have been on of the theories! You could have also mentioned things like colorless or games like hopscotch. Those typical old people stereotypes. |
Prose and formatting: | 10 | Clean, no spelling or grammar mistakes in sight. Page is organized neatly and well. No need for a score under ten! |
Images: | 8 | 1st Image:
This one is great, it's a good quality picture of junk, with a cleaver caption! 2nd Image: Not quite sure what the caption is saying...who is captain orange? But hell the picture suits the article...so i would say to keep the picture but defiantly change the caption 3rd Image: This image is not needed. It's caption is not that funny and the picture itself isn't either. Lets face it, old Asians look funnier that old black dude, i would blame the karate kid for that.
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Miscellaneous: | 8.75 | Did the typical thing and averaged the scores. |
Final Score: | 43.75 | One thing i have to say is about the quotes. I may have only mentioned it in the intro, but what i said there goes for the full article, there are too many pointless quotes, and too little humorous ones.
But congrats, you did one hell of a job. After the quote adjustments and the small other touch ups I would say to put it up for VFH ...wait...this wasn't yours...ugh I wish i knew that *facepalm*. Well what you wrote were all the funny parts, so great job. And for a final tip, I think that the article should actually be called "Good ol' Days" or is it "Good 'ol Days"...either way, i think that would just plain sound better. Up to you. And yes if you were wondering, I made this one extra long because of the wait i put you through...well sorta. |
Reviewer: | --Happymonkey39 Dah Meme Master 00:54, August 15, 2010 (UTC) |