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Dwight D. Eisenhower

With all due respect, to the last reviewer, could someone else take a look at this? I'm pretty happy with the part about Eisenhower's military career, it's just that the article switches gears very suddenly, and I want to know if a) this detracts too much from the article and b) if the presidency bit is funny, of if the satire is too heavy handed. Cap'n Sir Ben GUN WotM VFH VFP 04:55, 17 March 2009 (UTC)

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Allow 48 hours for the review to be completed, because I have a life. --—The preceding signed comment was added by Projectmayhem666 (talk • contribs). 14:30, 17 March 2009 (UTC)

And I heard you have a broken wrist. —Sir Socky (talk) (stalk) GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 20:28, 17 March 2009 (UTC)

Why don't people like my reviews? People don't ask for 2nd opinions when I say there article is amazing.--Smokin' Cheddar BBQ: The King of the Triangular Snackfoods

There is that which makes my reviews slower, but hey. CBBQ, ask for some feedback from some of the steel kidneys, they'll tell you if you're doing something wrong. --—The preceding signed comment was added by Projectmayhem666 (talk • contribs). 13:14, 18 March 2009 (UTC)

Thank you, sir. --Cap'n Sir Ben GUN WotM VFH VFP 22:50, 18 March 2009 (UTC)

Humour:	7	I'm not American, I have no idea who Eisenhower is, but if its funny I'll let you know. The quotes are ok, the first one is funny, the second I don't get (see opening point). In the military career, a Second Lieuftenant out ranks a Sergeant, so he wouldn't be peeling potatoes because he annoyed the Sergeant. This section is very funny, I like how it's done with using comedy instead of bullets so to say, very good section indeed. The stock characters part, brilliant. This section is fine and worthy of admiration. Pre-presidency, its average, fairly the way through then at the end, the "I like Dick" bit, genius. It gets unfunny towards the end, perhaps a re-write of the following sections (after pre-presidency) because the only thing really funny was him building a quater of the highway himself, see if you can build these up to the standard you have on the rest of the article.
Concept:	8	Great concept 5/5 and good implementation in the first half but the second isn't as good, 3/5
Prose and formatting:	9	Nothing here that cannot be fixed under microsoft words spellchecker. Good formatting, good prose.
Images:	6	Too many images, I especially like the one with nixon as that Dastardley guy. But too many far this article.
Miscellaneous:	4	Good half way through, but needs somework in the second half. Hope this review was helpful, and no it doesnt distract the reader at all.
Final Score:	34	Great article, hope to see this on VFH when the second half is funnier.
Reviewer:	--—The preceding signed comment was added by Projectmayhem666 (talk • contribs). 13:44, 18 March 2009 (UTC)