Uncyclopedia:VFH/UnNews:Blue Tomatoes found in California, scientists puzzled

Article: UnNews:Blue Tomatoes found in California, scientists puzzled	Score: -3
Nominated by:	- TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 17:14, 23 June 2009 (UTC)
For: 1	Self-Nom First UnNews, so please dont be so critical - TALK What's it like to be a heretic?
Against: 4	I'm gunna go against on this one. There are a bunch of grammer errors in there, along with a few other issues. I would try working on the tone of the article, to make it sound more official and News-y, and a get some cohesion within each paragraph, along with really trying to pump up the humor in there. You should probably take a look at some other UnNews articles to see some ideas on how to format the article better, and get the tone down. I know this sounds like a lot, but for your first UnNews this wasn't a bad stab. It does have a lot of room for improvement before it becomes featurable in my opinion though. Hope this helps. Woody On Fire! Talking Woody Stalking Woody 19:33, 23 June 2009 (UTC) Against. Did you listen to anything Cajek said in the Pee Review? Anything? • • • Necropaxx (T) {~} 00:28, Jun 24 Against. Needs a lot more work, per the review. Don't be so eager to get your article on VFH - take the advice you were given by someone who knows what they are talking about and make it better. --UU - natter 11:34, Jun 24 Against. Way not cool. It's a news scoop!!!XD 75.60.27.102 12:59, 24 June 2009 (UTC) Oh noes! It's the return of the village idiot! ~ 14:04, 24 June 2009 (UTC) Against. TKFU U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U UU U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U U CK 05:34, 25 June 2009 (UTC)
Comments	Comment: "China, another major tomato-producing plant, became so jealous at California that they decided to make blue tomatoes of there own."-- 19:14, 23 June 2009 (UTC) Please sir... Woody On Fire! Talking Woody Stalking Woody 19:33, 23 June 2009 (UTC) Then I heard somebody say BURN BABY BURN, Disco Inferno!-- 11:22, 24 June 2009 (UTC) Hahaha... I like it. But, and I saw the review already, I just think we should be a little nicer to our obvious n00bs. I think this would be a first time offense of not listening to a review at all. I just think we should be a little nicer to our first time offenders that's all. Woody On Fire! Talking Woody Stalking Woody 14:43, 24 June 2009 (UTC) I know, I got your point and I agree. But that was nice for mean old Dr Strange!-- 14:53, 24 June 2009 (UTC) Pee Review. Sir Modusoperandi ^Boinc! 22:18, 23 June 2009 (UTC) Abstain. I like it, but it's not "epic" enough for the front page. —Sir Socky (talk) (stalk) GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 08:25, 24 June 2009 (UTC)