Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/User:Ggarfield/Sex Positions
user:Ggarfield/Sex Positions[edit source]
user:MaddMax has assigned me with the duty of cleaning up this once deleted thing. Note to anyone who does not get it, the MS Paint Images here are a direct parody of the Wikipedia article of the same name (-the user:Ggarfield/ bit). Thanks. --
Major'GUN' Ggarfield, Le Marquis de Nofu .Complex! 21:37, 14 December 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 6 | Lacks a certain... panache. As a whole the article is a parody of Wikipedia's page so it should be written in Wiki-prose (maybe sporking parts of the actual article). There's some good funnies in there, such as the wonderfully OTT "open-faced reverse missionary sex position with lettuce, tomatoes, pickles, and hollandaise sauce". However, the article really needs to be increased in length, and, if yew please, take away and replace some of the randomness in the article ("missionaries in Africa in the 1700s convinced black men that they could screw their wives in a way similar to the way they screwed their dogs" might look great in 4chan but unfortunately not so here). What yew need to do is keep some coherence together (maybe stringing a story together that spans the whole article) and maybe undo the Uncyclopedia clichés in there (let's face it, who isn't tired of russian reversal, it just will never be funny, ever, ever, ever; sorry). That way, ywr article could be great! |
| Concept: | 9 | Great idea for an article (considering Uncyc is by definition a Wikipedia parody) and I think on the whole that idea for a page is a pretty needed one: Why wasn't there a page on sex positions before is beyond me! Either way, ywr filling a void in that should have been filled and that's very commendable :) |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | It's a bit of an ugly page, shaping-wise. I think the pictures need to be balanced out, size-wise so that the article flows properly. There are a few grammar mistakes in there, and the quotes need to be properly {{Q}}'d instead of just italicising it. It's mostly the pictures that make it ugly though, not just through sizing but through the actual pictures in themselves. See below |
| Images: | 5 |  I get ywr idea with the whole take the piss of the wikipedia pictures... however, is it not written, "A well-designed image is funnier than a poorly done image", or something? I know ywr intention, but really those pages could have been made in minutes on MS Paint. Maybe yew could potatochop the original wikipedia pics, or yew could request a picture to be made! Also, please get rid of the lesbians picture. It's out of place 4chanism... even the name of the pic is a bunch of numbers.... if yew want to get some lesbian stuff in keep the article to the point and make the pic look like all the rest of the pics ^_^ |
| Miscellaneous: | 6.3 | Avg'd using {{Pee|6|9|5|5}} |
| Final Score: | 31.3 | And definitely, once yew are done, yew should put it in the mainspace. A sex positions parody needs is place on here! ^_^ |
| Reviewer: | ~Fag x FS 19:47, 17 December 2007 (UTC) | |