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UnBooks:Who Killed God?[edit source]
Up by request of the authors. :) --THINKER 08:25, 22 June 2007 (UTC)
- Make mention that I co-wrote it with him. -- 19:14, 22 June 2007 (UTC)
- Oh. Sorry about that. :( The Humbled Master 19:33, 22 June 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8.5 | Not always laugh-out-loud funny, but consistently amusing throughout. This helped to keep me in that state of mind where funny stuff becomes funnier, and I did laugh out loud in a few places. I especially liked the section about the priest. I can't really think of anywhere in this page that could use more jokes or humor. |
| Concept: | 8 | Good concept. Good use of the "straight-man"(Marcks) in contrast to Frederick. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | This is the tricky bit. See, the sentence structure seemed alright to me, but people like paragraphs. There's really nothing you can do about this, as it's the style of the writing you've chosen. Also, I'd try to use a few more headers, if you can, as some of the chapters and parts got a little bit longish. |
| Images: | 7.5 | There could probably be one or two more images. Perhaps at the top, one showing the actual book, Who Killed God. Also, Maybe one below the "unknown comic" pic at the very end of the story. Perhaps it could show a box of Teddy Bears, or Frederick at the moment of either his extreme brilliance or extreme stupidity. |
| Miscellaneous: | 9 | I loved the subtle references to Nietzsche, Marx, Engels, and Ed, Edd, N' Eddy. |
| Final Score: | 40 | Basically, you've got a great article that, with maybe just a little touching up and a few additions could easily be featured. Honestly, I don't know why this wasn't featured the last time it was on VFH. Anyways, good luck with this one, because, IMHO it's FA material. |
| Reviewer: | P.M., WotM, & GUN, Sir Led Balloon  (Tick Tock) (Contribs) 16:09, 15 July 2007 (UTC)
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