Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Miles Davis
Miles Davis[edit source]
I took this article and totally reshaped it, excepting the discography. --Knucmo2 01:41, 5 February 2008 (UTC)
Knucmo2 01:41, 5 February 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 9 | Ha! That is funny! It's almost perfect. Problem is that the higher the score, the harder it is for me to find improvements. |
| Concept: | 8 | It's a good concept. Keep thinking of new articles for me to review. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | Format is good. Passing grade. Did a good job with the prose, too. Little improvements to make. Maybe make the subjects funnier? |
| Images: | 7 | Fine job with images, especially the humor in it. Need more humor in it. Try finding more images to put in and funny captions to put it in. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8 | The article is a awesome project. Keep it up. |
| Final Score: | 40 | Don't give up after that successful article. |
| Reviewer: | IViking 13:31, 28 February 2008 (UTC) | |
Comment: I haven't read this fully at the moment, so can neither agree nor disagree with the score. But one thing to mention is: get rid of the discography. UN:LIST gives a reason or two, but if you've put a lot of work in to re-writing it, it seems a shame to leave an unfunny list tacked on to the end. Oh, and the same goes for the band members bit after it.
And you do need a couple more images - an article of this length needs a few images to break it up. I'm sure you can find a few relevant ones. They don't have to be really funny, as long as they're relevant and reasonably captioned. --SirU.U.Esq. VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 14:17, Feb 28
- Alright, no more list, and band members bit's gone. I've put some carefully-chosen images in, reedited some bits, although I could do with a free image of Miles actually playing trumpet; there seems to be no licensed ones. Is there anything else that could be done? Is anything still letting the article down quite majorly? --Knucmo2 19:15, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
/me runs in, pretending to be out of breath Oh, I missed it? In all seriousness, I'm so sorry that I never got to this. If you would like a full length review still, just say the word and I'll be happy to draw up a table for you right this very minute. But I can't promise that I'll say much that UU didn't already say. Gawd, that kid really needs to keep me in line. If he wasn't breathing over my shoulder all the time, I'd never get anything done.sir
sysrq @ 03:02 Apr 20
- /me coughs nervously... - P.M., WotM, & GUN, Sir Led Balloon
(Tick Tock) (Contribs) 03:05, Apr 20
- /me coughs nervously... - P.M., WotM, & GUN, Sir Led Balloon
