Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/A Tale Of Two Cities
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A Tale Of Two Cities[edit source]
Hmm, hi. This will be the second time someone pisses on article of mine, so I'm still very scared! Even more scared because I don't think this article is really any good, but I want to know if there is any way I can make this work (and I know - and also surprised that some people haven't said this to me - I'm working on far too many articles at once, I should really concentrate on one article, but oooh well...).
- 10:47 4 AprilSir FSt. (QotF BFF NotM) YTTE
- Hey reviewer person: tone it down. "It wasn't that good" is not cool, okay? You hear me? • <Apr 05, 2008 [1:21]>
| Humour: | 5 | It wasn't that good. The beginning shows that it has potential but mostly degrades into what appears to be a biography, something about porn and an movie section which just isn't good. What I think you should do is focus the article on the plot, how complex and deep it is, and how it inspired other works of porn. Now come the mandatory links. If you're not sure how to write your humor. HTBFANJS is your best friend in this case, also try to dig deep into your subconscious to come up with ideas for the article. |
| Concept: | 6 | This is a good subject for parody but the way it is currently... Meh. I was expecting to see a classic tale of two people in two cities trying to meet as one. But instead I got what seems to be a slightly generic article. You should try balancing the tale of an epic story with that of a complex porn movie. Making it seem like it's a porn movie though deep and complex, would make a much greater article. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | It's pretty good. Though you have to make some quotes normal sized, move some images to the right and make them smaller and remove an unnecessary template below the NSFW template. Other then that, it's pretty good for a first timer. |
| Images: | 4 | It's just two images. One for the top of the article, and one about the movie, which only describes the familiarity of the person. What I'm suggesting is pictures of the hot young bachelor, pictures of the love interest, pictures of the conflict, that sort of thing. Now I'm not saying that you have to go with these style of pictures. It's just a suggestion. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5.3 | Averaged by Pee Review Regulations |
| Final Score: | 26.3 | This is overall an article that has potential but that potential isn't being let out. It's being held back by what is so common. But I have hopes for this article and I wish it the best of luck. All you have to do is take some of my advice and take the time to redo it, when you finally redo it. You'll have an article that's worth reading and maybe even featurable. If you have any comments, leave me a message. I wish you the best of luck in your endeavors. |
| Reviewer: | The Improver talk • contribs • 23:35, Apr 4 2008 (UTC) | |