Talk:The Destiniad

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The Destiniad[edit]

I'm entirely new here, and this would be article one. I think it's somewhat humorous; however, I'm sure there's room for improvement, and I would like to gauge the amount of that improvement.

In regards to the lack of images, that is something where experienced help would be rather, er, helpful. Jim Groovester 01:41, 14 September 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 8 Very funny, I particularly enjoyed the internal quote and its description, and there was plenty of smart humor. Not a joke based on memes, anime, sex, or video games in sight!(Very good thing)
Concept: 9 Love the idea of this one.
Prose and formatting: 8 Pretty good. There were maybe a couple things to fix, ie: "It is unfortunate that the first occurrence of the self-fulfilling prophecy was a half-baked, in more ways than one, attempt at epic poetry." should be more like "It is unfortunate that the first occurrence of the self-fulfilling prophecy was such a half-baked (in more ways than one) attempt at epic poetry." It could go a different way, just fiddle around with the wording and see how it goes. Besides that, have a quick read of the page or send it to the good folks at UN:PROOF for help.
Images: 0 Seriously, get some images. Try Uncyclopedia:FAQ if you don't know how to add/upload. If you want a chop'd pic, try UN:PIC. Perhaps that bust of Homer I see in every textbook I've ever read for a picture?
Miscellaneous: 9 I added a bit to the ending to make it feel a bit more final.
Final Score: 34 I really liked this piece. Give it pictures, touch up some of the prose (essentially, read it over and over again, fixing issues, until it looks perfect), and please tell me if you need help or think you're done. If I think it has enough pics, I'll prolly give a nom on VFH. Like I said, I really liked it.
Reviewer: P.M., WotM, & GUN, Sir Led Balloon Baloon.gif(Tick Tock) (Contribs) 02:20, Sep 14, 2007