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The Color Problem Pee Review

Many thanks go to User:Komodo Gallant for the below Pee Review... Although I think he was a bit generous with his humour and concept scores, I think he hit the formatting and prose problems right on the head.

Humour:	9	It's brilliant. The first paragraph felt a little rushed and didn't seem to connect to the rest of the article as a whole, but for the most part it weaved together brilliantly, even through the eyes of a filthy American like myself. I especially liked 'keep colors seperate', 'red shift', and 'let's call the whole thing off'.
Concept:	10	It's great. An original concept with peckable execution.
Prose and formatting:	5	In some areas the sentence structure and grammar is lacking, and the article gets a little jumbled after the thing about Micheal Jackson. Some of the pictures are at fault for this. Maybe go through it reading aloud to see if there's anything you can smooth out a bit.
Images:	6	Some of them just seemed thrown in there, but some were used extremely effectively. I liked the captions on the 'Red shift' and 'Potato-Tomato' images, but I don't feel that the images 'Smashspeckys' and 'American1' added to it. It's completely up to you, however. I'm sure the article will do just fine without the revisions I've suggested, if you don't want to work on it anymore.
Miscellaneous:	7	Overuse of the passive voice makes me sad. However, jokes make me happy! Great, now look what you've done.
Final Score:	37	I'm new to Uncyclopedia, not an expert, so this is just a newbie's oppinion. But if you ask me, It'll be perfect if you just fiddle with the sentence fluency.
Reviewer:	--Komodo Gallant

As a result of Komodo Gallant comments I moved some of the pictures around in an attempt to make them make a bit more sence. I'm very aware that non Brits, might not get the "Specky" jokes at the start which reference the ZX81 computer, one of the first home computers in the UK which had many colours. To try to fix this I moved the "Smash Speckys" pic to the top where it fitted in around the Brixton Riots text (there was a famous Black Riot in Brixton London in 1981 over here UK world)...

Komodo Gallant was also spot on in that the writting was too much in the "pasive voice" hopefully I have improved this somewhat now.

A VFH attempt

After doing my best to take Komodo's comments onboard I decided to put The Color Problem up for VFH, managed to get a few votes, and then...

Mr Modusoperandi Makes a crying shame

The following comment was left by Modusoperandi, on the VFH comments section...

 :=*Your page is being read, Mister 9000 (if that is, indeed, your real name). Abstain for now, as I've got tears in my eyes, and the page is all blurry...when I sat down to read the page I wasn't paying attention and, um, landed on a ball. Some would say that I've said too much. To those people I reply, "Probably." and "Ice! I need ice! Waah!" Sir Modusoperandi Boinc! 12:41, 26 November 2007 (UTC)

To which I replied on Mr Modusoperandi's talk page...

An active voice on a passive comment

Hmm, the issue regarding the The Color Problem and your current abstention there of{{ in the VFH venture... Although it may seem to some (myself included) that your comments may, perhaps be considered passive, I am, as yet not completely sure as to your intentions towards my activity of the subject matter. I may speculate to assert (as I believe may be your voice) that a more active effort is required on my part? As I believe this to be the case I shall attempt to take a more active position on the matter? Regarding the issue of your tears, and perhaps a ball, I hope that your voice was a positive one, and not (as some may speculate) a crying shame due to possible extensive verbosity of the afore mentioned subject matter MrN 18:14, 26 November 2007 (UTC)

Ah. I just hate it when a nom'd page sits there for more than a millisecond without anybody contributing. As for the page, what I meant was; I did endeavor to read it, but something outside the page (from the "real world", as they say) snuck up, startled me, ruined my concentration, making me forget about whateveritwas that I was something something <pause> something <pause> My mother said I was special. Sir Modusoperandi ^Boinc! 22:56, 26 November 2007 (UTC)

Ah, Cool. I thought you were saying it was too much in the "passive" voice. Which it was I think! I made a few changes to make to a bit more "active" anyways... Thanks for your comments. MrN 22:59, 26 November 2007 (UTC)

OK, just turned my brain on... You think it has too many pauses and commas? OK. Will, see, what (if anything(in this situation(now))I might be able to do). MrN 23:17, 26 November 2007 (UTC)

Golly, you're breathing an awful lot into what was essentially a "Fret not, good Sir, your page is being read (despite the lack of votes thus far)" comment. You remind me of a young me, except I had better hair. Also, I wasn't funny looking, with buggy eyes and ears that stick way out...but it works for you. Really. Sir Modusoperandi ^Boinc! 23:50, 26 November 2007 (UTC)

Dam now your really messing with my head! I wonder where I might find an example of "When one should use quote marks and italic" and "when one should not"... Perhaps I may find some in the works of another... Perhaps MrN 23:59, 26 November 2007 (UTC)

Or perhaps I'm just a "Kid still fucking" around? MrN 00:01, 27 November 2007 (UTC)

OK, I have to admit that I'm struggling to tell a 'Putt-Putt for Jesus' mini-golf course from a Putt-Putt for Jesus mini-golf course, but maybe perhaps I could get a hint from one so punctual? MrN 00:32, 27 November 2007 (UTC)

Well, here's how I do it:

If someone is actually speaking, it's "Like this...", which helps to separate it from the non-talking bits.

If it's a product name or something similar, it's generally 'This', as it emphasizes it on the page, but it doesn't stick out too much, like bold.

If it's airquotes, or I just ate pudding, it's simply "this".

If it's a deliberate misspelling, or mangulation of English, that I think the reader might think is a mistake (rather than the opposite of that; a deliberate) it's just italics, like mangulation was earlier. And there, too!

Finally, none of these are rules, they're just how I do things, sometimes. Sir Modusoperandi ^Boinc! 00:46, 27 November 2007 (UTC)

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh! Got ya. I will try to take your recomandations to my article.... Many thanks (I think!) MrN 00:51, 27 November 2007 (UTC)

As for 'Putt-Putt for Jesus' mini-golf vs Putt-Putt for Jesus mini-golf, I have no idea; that's just how I picture it in my head (the mini-golf sign doesn't say "mini-golf" on it, as that's already implied when you have putt-putt, like how Bowl-A-Rama automatically means bowling). In any event, just do what looks right. You can always change it later. Sir Modusoperandi ^Boinc! 00:53, 27 November 2007 (UTC)

Many thanks again, your right about being able to change it later, but hea... Look at all the trouble you can get into if you get it wrong! Have fun... MrN 00:59, 27 November 2007 (UTC) }}

As is obvious from the above dialog, we a both completely bonkers. MrN 10:20, 29 November 2007 (UTC)

I love this article

Well done to the creator! I particularly like the Rainbow green party pic. -- Hindleyite Converse • ?pedia 20:27, 6 December 2007 (UTC)

Well thanks very much! It's always nice to get some praise. Yea that Bungle, he was a terrible right wing bigot you know.... MrN 20:30, Dec 6

Wait

This reads somewhat like Segregation except different --Sir DJ ~ Irreverent 08:53, 1 October 2008 (UTC)

Hmm, /me reads Segregation... so it does! A bit anyway... MrN 09:02, Oct 1

Angry White Male

WARNING: Not suitable for those who aren't educated to understand the joke, don't have a sense of humor and have nothing to do in their spare time. The moral opposite of...Jesus, Gandhi and Martin Luther King Jr. and the moral equivalent of Satan, Stalin and the first antichrist Napoleon. An example of an Angry White Male on his usual rants about minorities, including one who may fit in the "white" profile. +

A simple solution

Why not just call it "The Collar Problem"? It's clearly related to concepts of dominance and submission. Coming to think of it, the whole problem was probably caused by confusing "Colour" with "Collar". —Sir Socky (talk) (stalk) GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 23:22, 8 March 2010

It was origionally called The coler Problem. Then some American did not bother to read the article, thought it was a mistake and changed it to the American spelling.

(cur) (prev)  23:02, 20 November 2007 Thekillerfroggy (Talk | contribs | block) m (moved The coler 
Problem to The Color Problem) (undo) 

I thought that was rather funny and typical of the world so I left it. :) WoW, that was a long time ago... :) MrN 23:28, Mar 8

Wouldn't coler be pronounced as Cole-er, though? —Sir Socky (talk) (stalk) GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 00:30, 9 March 2010