Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/antie eurg

antie eurg[edit source]

69.242.127.203 20:19, February 11, 2010 (UTC)

Well, why not. Oh, and a tip: You put your text in the wrong place. It doesn't appear. And I think you mean VFD.—Sir ¬_¬ | Banter HOMOPHOBE!!!

NOTM 21:39, February 11, 2010 (UTC)

Humour:	2	Time for me to be a bastard. Alright, your humor is far too random and self-referential. Also, you put in "Over 9000" Never do that. Memes are looked down on in Uncyclopedia. Now, back to being self-referential. You used such things as "Do not delete this article" and "My foot odor", which is not good. Do not refer to your article as an article. Think of it this way: If you were saying this to someone, would you say "Do not delete this article"? Probably not. Also, memes as well. Russian Reversal, Chuck Norris, etc- these are overused and in general, not considered funny. And finally, random humor. Random humor can be pulled off, but not in this fashion. It sounds like you're just rambling on and on, and it gets pretty annoying. This is not funny. Have you read HTFANJS yet? It's very helpful about this type of stuff. Really, give it a read. It will help you with many of this article's problems. One last comment: In the "Links" section, what do waffles have to do with grues? This is not good.
Concept:	2	The concept itself is already pretty cliche, and your execution is very poor to boot. Something that hurts your execution is how short this article is, and the random-ness. Now, this concept can work. After all, Grue was featured. Oh, and speaking of features, look through UN:B for the best articles, which should sort of give you an idea of how a really good article should look and read. This section is always short for me because I give my advice for execution in the humor section.
Prose and formatting:	1	Ouch, well, this is the worst part of the article. There are many grammar and spelling mistakes. This really makes your article's humor have less of an effect. You failed to use apostrophes and a lot of your spelling was poor. A very notable mistake was that you misspelled anti. I would seriously recommend you put this through Microsoft Word, which will get rid of the grammar and spelling mistakes. Now, on to the prose and formatting. The lists were slightly annoying. To get a good list, follow the advice of UN:List. As I mentioned in the humor section, the article is too short. The paragraphs are not very long, remember a paragraph is usually at least 5 sentences. Also, the picture "ok so you accidently crossed paths whith an antie eurg now what?" (Put that title through Word, see the spelling mistakes?) is in the middle of the text and makes the paragraph look strange. This was not a very good point for your article at all, really.
Images:	2	There was only 1 image, it was just a picture of what an anti-eurg might look like. There was no caption, and like I said in the last section, it messes up the formatting. You need more images. You could try Radical X's corner for image requests. About captions. It is very important to have captions, these compliment the image and can make it much funnier. Of course, this is only if they're used properly.
Miscellaneous:	1.5	Instead of averaging, this is what I think of the article.
Final Score:	8.5	Look, I know you're new, but this is pretty poor. Please read HTBFANJS like I recommended above; it's an extremely helpful source. Sorry to say, but unless you improve it, this article will probably end up on VFD. You have most of what you need to cover on there, but you didn't execute it very well. I think you either need to start from scratch or pick a new topic. It's alright though, a lot of people don't do well on their first try. Sorry...
Reviewer:	—Sir ¬_¬ \| Banter HOMOPHOBE!!! NOTM 22:16, February 11, 2010 (UTC)

--69.242.127.203 23:31, March 15, 2010 (UTC)1.Its supposed to be spelled like that 2.dont criticize my humor 3.reread it I added alot more things

1. Well, sorry, that's not good.

2. That's my job as a Pee Reviewer.

3. Doesn't look like any better things...—Sir ¬_¬ | Banter HOMOPHOBE!!!

NOTM 23:33, March 15, 2010 (UTC)

--69.242.127.203 23:41, March 15, 2010 (UTC) cut me some slack i put my blood sweat and tears into it,insulting something i put my soul into is like insulting my mother

The intent wasn't to insult. It's actually an act of kindness for me to spend 1 hour of my life helping you with your article. You're insulting me because I worked on this review. Also, ur mthr s ghey lol!!!!1!1!!one!!!—Sir ¬_¬ | Banter HOMOPHOBE!!!

NOTM 23:44, March 15, 2010 (UTC)

Time for me to be mean. This article is a piece of shit. My first article was crap, but it was better than this. And I did your mom last night.--