Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/You should talk about ponies - A letter to Bill Richardson
You should talk about ponies - A letter to Bill Richardson[edit source]
This is the first time I've requested a Pee Review since before you guys went all crazy in-depth about it. I got the idea after some black girl in one of my classes asked the teacher if any of the politicians ever talk about armadillos. Yes, she was high. High as a mother fucking baseball hit by Hank Aaron in his prime (No baseball fans???). Just want some tips like what would be a better intro paragraph and some more pictures (as I completely suck at photoshopping) and all that other good stuff (like insulting my grammar). Break Rule 2, please. --MegaPleb • Dexter111344 • Complain here 21:28, 14 September 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8 | I am not sure how I feel about the beginning paragraph before the actual letter. It doesn't seem to add anything, and if you really want to keep it in there you should probably add more to it (and where did the whole "Waskily-Wabbit come in? Am I missing something?)
With that being said, I must say that the actual letter itself is hilarious! There is not much to add to the actual bulk of the article, and it should stay the same in my opinion! As for the last section, I don't think the picture really adds anything, and you could afford to take it out. I understand it depicts Gov. Richardson as the way you said he should change his appearance, but It just doesn't give any chuckles. |
| Concept: | 9 | The idea is absolutely flawless in my opinion, however the being and ending sections just throw me off a little on giving you a perfect score. |
| Prose and formatting: | 9 | The bulk of the article is excellent, no visible problems to me, and no spelling errors. However the OCD in me wants to point out that P.S. stands for post-script and it should be P.P.S for Post-Post-script, and not P.S.S as everyone seems to believe. |
| Images: | 7 | The JLo picture adds great taste (and if not, the guys will still love the article), but again, as I have said earlier, the last picture doesn't seem to add anything. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.25 | Average'd via a calculator! |
| Final Score: | 41.25 | My preview tells me you have a 41.25. That is a good score. It definitely passed the chuckle test (whatever that may be), just fix up the problems with the first and last sections and you will have a VFH article here! Sorry I couldn't break rule 2 very well for you. |
| Reviewer: |  Pirate Lord__Sonic80 (Yell • Latest literary excretion) __ 17:09, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
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Damn. Thanks for the review Sonic, even though you didn't even call me a cum-machine once! I agree with the intro paragraph thing... I see how it isn't necessary.
The waskily-wabbit bit was just the Elmer Fudd and Scooby Doo fan showing in me. Yes. I know. I love all those Looney Toon and Hanna-Barbera cartoons. Maybe just too much...
And my reason for the picture is just how insanely funny it would be if Richardson actually said, "Yes! Ponies rule!", too. Meh. I'm gonna leave it...
I'm just gonna point out that this is what my average article is like, and yet I can't get a single feature...