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This namespace is not usually good. So I tried to make it good. Did I make it good? You decide? (shout-outs to The UnIdiot, who started it, and Some user, who also did a whole bunch of stuff) - T.L.B. WotM, UotM, FPrize, AotM, ANotM, PLS, UN:HS, GUN 00:35, Jun 7

Humour:	7.6	There is some good fun stuff here, the bit on Bill and Ted's divorce, Keanu Reeves on buses, and the naked mud wrestling is priceless! (Not a phrase I use very often by the way). About 75% of the quotes are good. The problem is that there are some bad ones in there that muddy the waters and detract from the rest of it. To make it easy I'll make a list of quotes I liked and the ones I thought didn't work. The first two quotes work, the third one doesn't. All the existential quotes work. (The rest are in the format Quote - Comment) The Blue pill - No, spoon bender- needs to be reworded, Cereal - yes nice, Getting raped right now - yes, Paying attention - yes, Then get loaded - too long needs to be punchier, naked mud wrestling - yes! Robotic dolphin - no too inaccessible, my existence - yes, Ferraris - yes, I have no life - good buildup but the therapy punchline doesn't really work, Iron maiden - didn't get at first but then laughed well at the second reference, A guy that hot - yes, Women's laugh - good but needs to be slightly punchier, he played Bill - YES, melting in the theatre - not really funny, Build a flying spacecraft - yes, reactor - yes, River Phoenix - doesn't work overall try rewording it, final iron maiden reference - takes the joke too far spoils it. Right, hope you can decipher that. The annotations, another list: Like the annotations so far as 6. 7 and 8 don't work. 9 detracts from the good joke in the quote. 10 works better than the quote, try making the annotation the quote. 11 doesn't work, neither does the quote, I'd drop it. 12 is good. 13 is a bit, nyah... 14 doesn't work either... 15 doesn't work... 16 is good... 17 doesn't work... 18 is redundant, the quote is good... 19 doesn't work... 20 doesn't work, neither does the quote. OK, long lists over. Overall, the humour is on the brink of falling in to the 'really good' category. It just needs a bit more to push it there.
Concept:	7.2	Concept is about what I'd expect from an article like this, there is a nice surrealism in a lot of it, the kind of semi-elevation of Keanu Reeves to genius level is nice stand point, gives good room for humour. Perhaps not evolved as much as it could be, I don't know, could you develop it further? There is room for more with the concept, I'm just not sure exactly where yet. Sorry if that's unhelpful, if I think of anything I'll let you know.
Prose and formatting:	7.8	Prose writing is pretty much all that it could be, formal and in true wiki-style. Article layout is good, I'm not sure if some of the sections are too short though. Could you find a way of grouping more of them together. On the other hand, the divisions break the article up in to nice bitesize chunks that make it easier to absorb. It could go either way. The main reason I've dropped points in this category is the annotations. I like them, some of them are very good, one or two are funnier than the quotes they link to. But you go overboard with them, they get gratuitous and as such lose their impact. I mean, you've got about three pages of total article and one whole page of that is annotations. Consider cutting a few out. Sometimes less is more
Images:	6	Images are adequate, more could be done though. I'd really like to see one of Keanu Reeves looking like a complete pratt (if your American that's British for moron). Images can bring a bit more.
Miscellaneous:	8.2	I like the foray in to existentialism, that qualifies as miscellaneous I suppose, and your exploration of it using Keanu Reeves grunts and moans is neat. That's all.
Final Score:	36.8	There is fun to be had here, just got a little bit further to go. Personally I'd like to see some 'Day the Earth Stood Still' references. A bit more polishing and its there. I'd like to see how this ends up. Keep up the work!
Reviewer:	--I live in your eyes 18:10, 7 June 2009 (UTC)

Thanks muchly for the review! I'm gonna get to work pruning this right now. Also, I haven't seen the Day the Earth Stood Still remake, only the original, so I dunno if I can do anything with that. If you want, though, feel free to throw in a quote about it, you sound like you know what you're doing--more so than me, at least. :P I think I'll add a conclusion of some kind, too... Anyways, thanks again! - T.L.B. WotM, UotM, FPrize, AotM, ANotM, PLS, UN:HS, GUN 19:30, Jun 7

Yeah, here's what I done. - T.L.B. WotM, UotM, FPrize, AotM, ANotM, PLS, UN:HS, GUN 21:26, Jun 7

Nice, good pruning down of the footnotes, got the right amount now. Articles much tighter. I haven't seen TDTESS either, but I'm just talking about that quote from the trailer... "Are you in pain... my body is..." I'm sure there's something to be done with that whole "My body is" quote. Anyway, I'm just off to vote... --I live in your eyes 13:24, 13 June 2009 (UTC)