Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Self-toasting bread
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That's right, YOU! can review an actual Savethemooses article! This is something I threw together about a year ago. I might be considering adding more to it in the near future. WHAT SAY YOU? -- 
01:14, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
Self-toasting bread[edit source]
| Humour: | 8 | Yeah, it made me laugh. I like most of it. Not much I could think to add other than that there should be a micro chip aduio command to activate toasting or perhaps a telepathic trigger. |
| Concept: | 9.5 | It's a great concept! |
| Prose and formatting: | 10 | Yeah, yeah literacy cat is amazed, etc. I can't complain about, well...anything in this department |
| Images: | 7 | Images are suitable but not in themselves funny. This would be the number one area for improvement. We need something like a scientist toiling over a loaf of bread. |
| Miscellaneous: | 10 | I loved the part about Potential Energy. Someone knows thier stuff! |
| Final Score: | 44.5 | I've said what needs to be said. Improve those two areas, expand a bit, and then go VFH it! |
| Reviewer: | -- Major'GUN' Ggarfield, Le Marquis de Nofu .Complex! 01:41, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
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Thanks for the critique, homey. I don't recognize your username, so welcome to Uncyclopedia. How's the picture I added? I think it's pretty good considering what I have to work with (MSPaint and my own artistic abilities). -- 03:44, 7 December 2007 (UTC)