Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Lack of News Causes Suicide Among Bloggers
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UnNews:Lack of News Causes Suicide Among Bloggers[edit source]
Alexandros 17:18, 21 May 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | This was actually really good! It is a little short though and could be expanded into areas like psychological research into why no news would drive people to kill themselves. Or the investigations into the broadcasting meltdown. Brain storm some ideas and see if you can come up with something funnier. But this is defiantly a good start.
you do sorta falter towards the end and i think you should have more opinions from people (esspecially people that don't care or even think its a good think "back in my day we had no such things as bloggers and now people just waste tehir lives typing inanly" sorta thing) and finish of the quote from Karen Sanders, as it'll be funny to let her ramble on. but yeah definitly a good start. |
| Concept: | 8.5 | I think your concept here is marvellous! It’s original and absurd but in a coherent manner. Kudos. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | Like images Links are essential to articles. And again the template is a little redundant. Also there is the Bolden issue again at the start of the article you need WASHINGTON D.C. This article was paragraphed properly though and was more like an UnNews article in that it had room to sound sensational. The ending though wasn’t very journalistic, and sounded like the closing of a bedtime story. You could try a paragraph something like this:
Though the bloggers are hugely upset by the loss it is also a gain in that for at least the next few weeks they will have plenty to write on, about the cleanup operations, psychological research and such and into the ongoing investigation into the broadcasting meltdown. Or something. |
| Images: | 0 | it hurts me to give this a zero as it’s really gonna drag down the overall score but there are no images. Image wise you could probably steal an still from that movie called “The Happening” it has a lot of people jumping of buildings and couple it with a caption like “this blogger actually survived the first fall and then dragged is shattered legs and leaking spine back up to the roof to try again.” Or something. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5.6 | Averaged. |
| Final Score: | 28.1 | If you’d like to thank/ask/insult me about anything please visit my talk page. |
| Reviewer: | Have Fun! MuCal. Orian57|Chat|Chuckle|PEE List|Awarded|UnBlog|  06:00, 22 May 2008 (UTC)
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