Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/HowTo:Get Nigger-Blood Out Of White Robes
HowTo:Get Nigger-Blood Out Of White Robes[edit source]
If you review this without using the word "racist" you get 3 points. -- rotted Ape (swim) (Riot Porn) 18:16, 28 August 2009 (UTC)
- I might--stress the might--review both this and your "Is the Government..." article at some point within the next few days, as I've been meaning to for a while, but have been quite busy. —Unführer Guildy Ritter von Guildensternenstein 18:13, September 3, 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 4 | Before I say anything, I should probably mention that I am in no way offended by this. Indeed, as you probably know, I find the idea of something being fantastically racist quite funny. So yeah.
Moving right along, I didn't find this too funny. Most of the humor is derived from making analogies between those dirty fucking niggers and how stained they make your clothes, and then how--through proper laundering--you can remove these stains and make your formerly soiled clothes as white and pure as your family's Teutonic heritage. In short, this is essentially a one-joke article, and as a result it runs out of steam pretty quickly. I only laughed once (at the AmericanX joke), and that was apart from the article's running joke. I sort of fell into a similar trap when I rewrote Biology--to me, the reiterated joke of "biology" meaning "one less than a trilogy" was pretty clever. However, not everyone thought so, evidently. I can't give you any specific advice to improve or rectify this (on a side note, I haven't looked at/revised my Biology article in weeks, because I can't think of what to do there, either), aside from maybe try to throw in more one-off jokes so the article's main joke doesn't lose steam as quickly. |
| Concept: | 7 | The idea is pretty clever, actually: Black = soiled, White = clean, analoged in terms of both people and laundry. This, contrasted with the obvious backwardness of people who think in those sorts of terms, makes for a clever, ironic, and subtly satirical little piece. However, most people will not see it that way. Most people will see this as either shallow and ultimately lacking, or just racist (and, in the case of the later, they will probably cry and go tell Rev. Jackson). Because what most people will think, I have to dock you a few points, unless you find a way to make this more explicit. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | By and large very solid. My only real complaints have to do with your sporadic hyphenation of "nigger-blood/nigger blood" and its variants. Also, the title should read either "HowTo:Get Nigger Blood Out of White Robes", or "HowTo:Get Nigger Blood out of White Robes", depending how anal-retentive you are about capitalizing prepositions in titles. Other than that, this reads just fine, though it's obviously a little on the short side. |
| Images: | 6 | The first image is pedestrian, the second is actually pretty funny. However, there's only two, and both span through several sections, and are therefore probably a bit too large. Make the pictures smaller and throw in a third somewhere. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6 | Average-ish |
| Final Score: | 30 | I guess just follow the above advice. |
| Reviewer: | —Unführer Guildy Ritter von Guildensternenstein 03:04, September 5, 2009 (UTC) | |