Talk:Pennywise the Dancing Clown
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Need someone to add some funnier stuff to article. Please?
- Try Pee Review. t o m p k i n s blah. ﺞوﻦ וףה ՃՄ ண்ஸ ފއހ วอฏม +տ trade websites 20:01, 22 April 2007 (UTC)
Mario picture[edit source]
Alright, what the hell does the mario picture have anything to do with this article? Someone explain this... Jimmy the Hellhound 11:36, 7 May 2007 (UTC)
- Absolutely nothing. Picture removed. --THE 19:00, 7 May 2007 (UTC)
Poor Pennywise[edit source]
Why hasn't anyone reviewed pennywise?--FREDD 07:05, 27 May 2007 (UTC)
From Pee Review[edit source]
Pennywise the clown[edit source]
This article sucks balls. I need some reinforcements. Heed the call, my fellow uncyclopedians!
Humour: | 4 | The randomness of the tale hurts the reading of that very same tale. Try focussing more on the clown and less on random name-dropping. |
Concept: | 6 | Evil clown is a good idea, as clowns are evil. Obviously. |
Prose and formatting: | 5 | Sentences like "For a long time, he dwelled in a sewer and molested and ate children until he was defeated in a presidential election, and settled on handing out balloons at Neverland Ranch." don't flow. It takes practice, I guess, but you want each phrase to lead into the next. "Unable to find adequate above ground housing in his price range, Pennywise was forced to take up residence in a sewer, where he spent nights and week after work molesting and eating small children, small rodents and small kitchen appliances. Eventually his neighbours, the Mole-Men, tired of his antics, stunts, tricks and general creepy vibe, leading the Mole-King to refuse to renew his lease." That's off the top of my head, granted, but hopefully you can see how it builds from obsurdity to obsurdity without resorting to a Michael Jackson reference. |
Images: | 7 | For the amount of text on the page, you've got too many pictures (although they are appropriate pics). Ideally you don't want the pics to overlap (Pic-text looks much better than Pic-text-part of another pic). The "hanging" pic at the end of the page is another eyesore, as it just hangs there, alone. Lonely pictures make me sad; try moving it up so that it can share the bed with some nice, warm text. |
Miscellaneous: | 10 | |
Final Score: | 32 | Focus, don't name-drop (Hulk, Kennedy, Jackson, Stallone, Jesus, etc is way too many unrelated people to have on the same page). |
Reviewer: | Sir Modusoperandi Boinc! 07:23, 27 May 2007 (UTC) |