Talk:Colony of America
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From Pee Review[edit source]
If you continue to use the words England and Britain interchangeably as if they're the same place I will have to kill you.--Kelpan 22:20, 4 April 2007 (UTC)
Humour: | 6 | Well the humour is good, really, but some lines are just too obvious. Also it seems that you know the history really well, but try to say it in a different way, like more satire and stuff. |
Concept: | 7 | Good concept, although the title could have been better, like Colony of America, or American Colony or other titles. Also I reckon an "encyclopedic" article is better than an article full of rhetorical questions. Just let it flows like an article. |
Prose and formatting: | 7 | That is why images are important, so the article seems to have plenty of words. The current formatting is good but it could be better. |
Images: | 1 | Only one image and it doesn't stand for the article, I reckon. |
Miscellaneous: | 5 | Try to avoid "downgrading" the Brits, they are scary, really. It is just a joke but some English are actually reading these pages as well. Also from the way you wrote the article, I can feel an "angry" or "fiery" tone. Remember KIE (keep it encyclopedic) and deliver with a normal tone. I reckon it would be better. |
Final Score: | 26 | Well it may seem a pretty "not-high" score, but I'm sure if you do some more work on it, the outcome will rock! |
Reviewer: | It's gneomI 08:21, 5 February 2007 (UTC) |
Definately needs to be re-reviewed. --
From Pee Review[edit source]
I'm putting this through Pee Review again, tell me what you think. --
Humour: | 7 | Starts out strong, loses a bit of steam towards the end, but overall a funny piece. |
Concept: | 9 | I like it a lot. |
Prose and formatting: | 7 | I love the frantic conspiracy-theorist tone. Its used well in this article. I think the formatting could use some work though (esp. in the area covering the wars). |
Images: | 5 | I like the ones that are there, but it definitely needs more. |
Miscellaneous: | 9 | You and I think similarly when it comes to word linking, which I like a lot. |
Final Score: | 37 | I definitely dig this article. I made a few minor edits, but I think that you're on exactly the right track. I recommend that you go through with the next edits yourself, as you are doing well with the humor so far. There may be a few grammar issues that fall outside the article's styling; if you need any help with those issues, feel free to leave me a message to that effect. Good stuff. :) |
Reviewer: | THINKER 06:03, 15 April 2007 (UTC) |