Talk:Caddyshack conspiracy
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Caddyshack conspiracy[edit source]
My first article. need some help. Thank you. GopherKiller Questions? Comments?
Humour: | 5 | I found one thing funny, everything else was just a setup that never went anywhere. What I mean by that is that you seem to be setting up for a gargantuan punchline at the end of the long dry spells without any laughs, and you never get there. It's a shaggy dog story of sorts. |
Concept: | 5 | It's strange, but has potential. |
Prose and formatting: | 8 | Well written, though a few grammatical corrections would help. |
Images: | 7 | Meh, relevant enough. I can't really see any way to improve them, but images aren't really my bag. |
Miscellaneous: | 4 | If you're going to do this bizarre yet potentially hilarious topic, you're going to have to keep a few things in mind. One: try to keep the setups to your jokes at maximum three sentences. The Second Conspiracy section could use a bit of work too. Try adding some more jokes in there. The article itself is also too short. Try adding a "Well-known Conspiracy Theorists" section, and also the last refuge of those trying to make it longer, a "See Also" section. |
Final Score: | 29 | Good luck. |
Reviewer: | Sir Ljlego, GUN VFH FIYC WotM SG WHotM PWotM AotM EGAEDM ANotM + (Talk) 12:59, 16 September 2007 (UTC) |