User talk:Zoidy-Poo/Squidditch

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Right now, this article isn't that good. But it has potential, by the looks of it. How can we make this better? --AAA! (AAAA) 09:27, 4 March 2007 (UTC)

The first thing we need to do is fix all of the horrible formatting errors. I'll be working on that. --General Insineratehymn 09:40, 4 March 2007 (UTC)

Done. This article still needs major creative help, and as I am someone who is lacking in creativity, I am unfortunate to say that creative analysis is not my job. --General Insineratehymn 09:44, 4 March 2007 (UTC)

Ehh. I added some stuff. *Is planning to maybe add more* Zoidy-Poo 10:06, 5 March 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	3	Wow. Just way too many curses, and none of them funny.
Concept:	6	I'm gonna be nice, because it could be good. Crappy implementation. Try making some fun of Harry Potter in it. You know, at least once.
Prose and formatting:	9	User:Insineratehymn already fixed this, so it's good.
Images:	4	The images are too small and lack originality unless others are placed in there.
Miscellaneous:	2	So many comments. You need to work hard on this article, harder than you worked initially anyway. The origin sucks, the World Cup sucks, there is no lead. I would suggest trying harder to try and figure out a way to make the origin funny (that's where I'd say the Harry Potter comes in). The world cup needs to be a part of a (as of yet unincluded) Squidditch Today section. The lead should be there, and I suggest it being a commentator on a Squidditch game.
Final Score:	24	The article, as noted on it, is a piece of crap. But it doesn't have to be. Look above for my suggestions, and good luck. As a side note, I'm going to put a construction tag on it. If you don't improve it within seven days, it'll get deleted, which is what it deserves at this moment.
Reviewer:	Ljlego 18:17, 4 March 2007 (UTC)

• The article is far to short. It needs conent. -- The Zombiebaron 19:26, 4 March 2007 (UTC)