User:Shabidoo/happymonkeycompetition/2015/Mhaille Scores and comments

Happy Monkey Competition 2015

Results and scores for Mhaille

From Sarah[edit | edit source]

Creativity	Humour	Originality	Total
8,5/10	8/10	7,5/10	24/30

'For a popular and much loved performer to go without the tiniest blemish or even a whiff of controversy throughout their long and successful career is relative unheard of within the modern era. That the only controversial event involving arguably the most beloved performer of our time came after his untimely death brings his untainted life into sharp relief' was funny. Not the most original technique to create a joke perhaps, but it always works and you wrote it well. 'In the closet with Bubbles' made me laugh. Creative idea to start off with father Jackson's response and have everyone refer to him. Good job!

From GrammarFegelein[edit | edit source]

Creativity	Humour	Originality	Total
8.5/10	6.5/10	8/10	23/30

I like that the article sticks with the clever concept of a catchphrase about Michael Jacksons death turned into an Internet meme turned into a TV game show. The pictures were OK and the creativity just shines through for me. This is it. Where is my signature? 08:58, 5 August 2015 (UTC) Oh there it is!.

From Shabidoo[edit | edit source]

Creativity	Humour	Originality	Total
9.5/10	9.5/10	9/10	28/30

Death of Michael Jackson was a funny and nifty way to start. The reverse meme idea was very creative. "How about this weather, eh?" and "What about them <insert sportsteam's vernacular nickname>?" is hardly original but creatively placed and funny. The concept is really well worked out and rendered. The transition from meme to michael jackson to TV show was superbly pulled off in what is nothing less than a very creative way.

I was chuckling or even laughing out loud throughout. Very funny. My favourite lines

due in no small part to the complete lack of any negative reporting across the entirety of Michael Jackson's life and career.
the name was changed slightly for legal reasons

"I'm an Ascended Master.....Get Me OUT of Here!"

"Celebrity: This is IT! Where's the Money!" broke viewing records worldwide, cementing its place withintelevision history.

twenty-seven minute opening title song

In the Closet with Bubbles

which would itself go on to win numerous awards within the music industr

celebrity lawyer

Aliens
Has daddy seen this? You'll be hearing from his lawyers... (brilliant)

The "each contestant" paragraph was rather wonky. Not up to the same standard as the rest of the article in my opinion. The final paragraph was also a bit of a bust...which...being the good writer you are...you should know better. In any case...this is the happy monkey kind of article. A near perfect score. You snappy jack-whipper! ShabiDOO 19:46, 3 August 2015 (UTC)

From THS[edit | edit source]

Score
7.5/10

Bit of a one-joke premise. Still, it was kinda funny. I like the part about fellow pedophile (and, unlike MJ, actually convicted) R. Kelly. Nice touch. ~[t h s] UotM 22:23, 08/05/2015