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User:SysRq/Dishwasher[edit source]
I think HV was gonna do this one for meh. Thanks in advance. I wrote this in a couple days, cruising for another feature. Yes? No? Mebbe? Help is appreciated. ~Minitrue Sir SysRq! Talk! Sex! =/ GUN • WotM • RotM • AotM • VFH • SK • PEEING • HP • BFF @ 18:00 Jun 6
- Yup, I'll take this one (for once!). Just going to go eat a Chinese, then I'm all on this. ―― Sir Heerenveen, KUN [UotM RotM VFH FFS SK CM NS OME™] (talk), 6/06 18:02
Humour: | 7.4 | Right, I'm going to start of here by saying I've done the Images first, then the concept, then the prose and the humour last. Anyways, onto the review:
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Concept: | 8.5 | We need an article on dishwashers. Obviously. And just a normal encyclopedic article would have got a seven from me, as that's my baseline for concepts. This goes much further though, with a steep build up to what is a very good ending, like I'm going to say in about ten minutes (like I say, I'm doing concept before humour). I especially like the manual labour > dishwasher angle in the start bit of "Good things about dishwashers", as well as the brilliant first picture (You're finding out that I really really really like that image). Very good concept, but it does follow a tried-and-tested formula in a way (reading it, it seems almost El Jek like). |
Prose and formatting: | 9 | Almost perfect. Almost. The only thing I can fault you on is the lack of emboldening of the first mention of the title. Everything else is brilliant (you may want to consider <small>ing the references, but that's it). Image formatting is especially good, such as that fucking brilliant first image with the perfectly short caption. |
Images: | 9 | Abso-fucking-lutely brilliant. I normally don't score above seven for images, as I don't feel they are usually that much of a push-on for an article. However, I'm making an exception for that first image here: Best. Image. Evar. Seriously, it takes your attention away from the too-short lead to the point where you barely notice the rest of the article. I like the other images too: concise, to-the-point, with bloody funny captions. Great job. |
Miscellaneous: | 8.5 | n/a |
Final Score: | 42.4 | This just needs a little bit of touching up in the content application, and it'll be more than good enough for VFH. Hell, it might pass in this state, since VFH is slow right now (hell, it was slow enough for me to get a feature!). Just needs a little bit more substance and a longer lead. Also, the best use of images I've seen here, with that first image (also, I've succeeded in mentioning that image in every review section). Great work! |
Reviewer: | ―― Sir Heerenveen, KUN [UotM RotM VFH FFS SK CM NS OME™] (talk), 6/06 19:04 |