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User:Lyrithya/Daemonic kitties[edit source]
Maybe if I put this here now someone will review it less than a month after I finish the rough draft. Although I feel kind of bad adding anything, considering the state of the queue... bugger. ~ 
15:10, 5 July 2011
- I might try a stab at this. —Sir Socky
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GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 16:36, 5 July 2011
| Humour: | 7 | I like this article. It is funny because, let's face it, all cats have the potential for evil. There is just something about them. The Onion sells a T-Shirt that says, "Kitten thinks of nothing but murder all day," and you can see how it is true. So, where is there room for improvement on the humor? Well, I would eliminate the distinction that some cats are not within the demon family - I think they all should be, and that that would make the article funnier. Also, while I love the general description of the demon cats and how they vary, I would add some compare/contrast to other creatures, maybe the Chupacabra (just a personal thing, I think). And the part about psychotropic drugs and kitties is hilarious. So what would I change? I am not sure the part about dragons works. I think that the demon kitties should stand on their own, and should not be a possible subset of or relative to the dragon. Demon kitties are funny, but dragons are not (except maybe the luck dragon Falcor from NeverEnding Story, but that is again a matter of personal taste, and anyway, that dragon looks like a dog, not a kitty). I love the part about the moose because it is so random (unlike the dragon connection), so I think the moose connection is a keeper. And the descriptions of kitties being pure evil is spot on. So are the pseudo-scientific classifications. Maybe you could add some kind of info box about the evil kitties? |
| Concept: | 10 | Like I said before, I think the idea of evil kitties is awesome. Great concept. Not much else to say. The improvement would come in the specific references discussed above, but I would not alter the concept. |
| Prose and formatting: | 9 | The prose and writing style are very good - very encyclopedic. There is really not much to say here in the way of room for improvement. Maybe I would not do internal links on some of the words (like "some" and "those"), since such words do not seem to be critical to the article's theme. Still, these are minor quibbles. |
| Images: | 9 | The photos are possibly the best thing about article. The first picture with the shadow cat with wings is great, and so is the SWAT team training its guns on the kitty. However, I think the photo involving the dragon section is weak, but that is also just because I do not like the dragon connection personally (maybe others will think it is funny). The demon kitty bird is priceless. What about a picture for the moose/kitty connection? That could really tie the article together. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.8 | I used the Pee Review Average Function. |
| Final Score: | 43.8 | This article is really good and could just use some polishing as described above to be ready as a feature, in my humble opinion. And as a closing comment, I like the "see also" links. I knew that "Proper care and treatment of daemonic kitties" would not really take you anywhere like that, but it was still funny to see. |
| Reviewer: | --Sir NoNamesLeft (GUN) WotM NotM 04:09, July 6, 2011 (UTC) | |