Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:2008 election race continues
UnNews:2008 election race continues[edit source]
The UnIdiot and I whipped this up--it's essentially an ill-conceived idea we got from watching an episode of America's Most Wanted(don't ask), followed by about 6 political commercials in a row(it's even worse than it sounds). Well, here it is, go to it. - P.M., WotM, & GUN, Sir Led Balloon 
(Tick Tock) (Contribs) 04:31, Jan 3
| Humour: | 8 | Those crazy politicians. What will they get up to next? Some good satire, although I think it may be a bit too simplistic at the moment. As a Brit, I don't know the candidates as well as I could, but, for example I know one of them's a mormon. You could reference that. Also, maybe Hilary could make a big deal about who her husband is? |
| Concept: | 8 | We definitely need to address the presidential race and the campaign ads are a very good way to do this. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | I corrected a few minor formatting/grammar errors. The main problem is the lack of sections, to separate out the candidates. At the moment it feels a bit bitty, if that makes sense. Maybe cquote might improve the look of some of the quotations. |
| Images: | 7 | They do the job. It would be good if you could find a campaign poster to include, or make one. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7.25 | You stole my idea!. You can have it. |
| Final Score: | 36.25 | I like it, but a few added details may be needed. |
| Reviewer: | -- 15Mickey20 (talk to Mickey) 23:46, 3 January 2008 (UTC) | |
Having since done a bit of research into the campaign ads, I noticed a trend for the candidates to try and personalise their messages. I think it would be a good idea for one of the candidates to tell a story from their youth which relates to one of the issues of their campaign (healthcare seems to be a good one). This says "Hey, I may be a powerful politician with much more money than the average person, but I really understand what Americans are going through. I've been there." You can fill in the details as I'm just an ill-informed Brit. -- 15Mickey20 (talk to Mickey) 13:53, 4 January 2008 (UTC)
- Ah, interesting observation, I'll see if I can add that. Meanwhile do you like my additions so far? - P.M., WotM, & GUN, Sir Led Balloon
(Tick Tock) (Contribs) 21:47, Jan 4
- The only thing is, Giuliani's reference to Romney's mormonism is a slight attack, which contradicts the following paragraph. It's not a full out attack, so it might not be a big problem. -- 15Mickey20 (talk to Mickey) 23:03, 4 January 2008 (UTC)