Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Red vs. Blue
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Red vs. Blue[edit source]
Rewrote a crappy article. Did I do it right? --Reverse Genocide Cockatrices 10:02, December 16, 2009 (UTC)
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YOU 333 07:51, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8 | In terms of formatting, adding pictures and speaking in a less to none noobish way, you did better than previous editors. But there's one thing that pretty much is a major problem: the only thing I see that talks about the series is the title. Even though you have a nice idea going, instead of actaully talking about the Red Vs Blue series, you removed all of that and made it into a article about politics against each other. Many non-Red vs Blue fans would have no problem with that, but many Red Vs Blue fans would be very dissappointed with this, considering it has nothing to do with the actual series. Although I personally like this and I don't think you should rewrite it, I think you should move this to something like Red Vs Blue (Politics) or something like that. Or maybe combining the two and make politics based on the show. If you havent seen the webshow in your entire life, look at Wikipedia, Red vs Blue Wiki, or go to Rooster Teeth's website(the creators) to learn more Or just watch the show yourself, they're all over youtube. Besides all that it good. |
| Concept: | 7 | Good concept but it isnt based on the webshow series of the same name. This, however, if put in a article of its own, the concept wiould work just fine. |
| Prose and formatting: | 9 | Good in formating, but I still see a few mistakes. Have someone proofread it to fixed those spelling mistakes. |
| Images: | 10 | They supported your article greatly, even though they don't go with the actual series, they go with article great. |
| Miscellaneous: | 9 | average |
| Final Score: | 43 | Despite what I said above, I'll give this article a good grade for it just being readable and entertaining to read. However, I highly suggest moving this to another article with a similar but different name, as I said above, to avoid contradiction and maybe rewrite it based on the webshow of the same name, but certainlty don't revert it back to it's old piece of s*** version. When you do that, maybe get it VFH. Good luck. |
| Reviewer: | --WILLYOU 333 08:34, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
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