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Noahlikescakeandpie 00:38, November 9, 2009 (UTC) Thank you in advance, I'm new at this if you haven't noticed

Im still reviewing this, but its late so ill finish it tomarrow

sorry my computer messed up and i lost some of the data and couldt finish on time, so now i have to rewrite it.---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 21:34, November 10, 2009 (UTC)

This raptor is guarding this article while his master, Iwillkillyou333 is reviewing it. Be Careful! He Bites.

Humour:	3	First I would first like to say welcome to Uncyclopedia since you stated your new. Its great to see new user joining make this website. Now about your article I belive it has some potential, but as for funny, not so much. I know you try to make it funny and that you think people would also think its funny, but there is a different between funny and stupid, and the article, im afraid, would be considered stupid by others. I know thats the whole point of this article, but not rarely anybody finds stupidity funny, and would simply go somewhere else. It canalso end up having your article deleted in VFD or QVFD. Let me point out some things here that you need to fix and make into a proper article. First' First thing is your quotes. Quotes should only be put on an article if they are actually funny, otherwise, they should be avoided. Although that choice is up to you. Second The second thing is your intro paragtaph. Its looks like a 5 year old wrote this. Many people will be turned away by this because the intro isnt being presented in a satirical way, and people will not even read the first section. Make it more professional and make the intro interesting so that people would become curious and develope a want to read it. The best way to do this is look at other people's articles, preferebly featured articles, to see how they start out their article. However you also want to make sure it doesnt contradict what your article after the intro says. Third Much of your article is completely random. many people will think this isnt well written and would look somewhere else.It would be wise to look at peoples articlesz (especially if they're featured) to get an idea especially if its featured Also Each section must have more than on sentence, at least a paragraph or two and not saying shut up.
Concept:	1	There wasnt much of a concept is what is really killing your article. Like i said before look at another article to get an idea. With a strong concept you get a good article.
Prose and formatting:	2	there are some spelling errors, this will also turn down someone. There are two options to six this, Microsoft Word and proffreadin. Microsoft word has spell check. Unfortuantly it may not always be right. The second and best option is our proofread service. All you have to do is put a template on your article and someone from proofread will fix any error. I highly recommened it. Also i say this to everybody who does this, avoid red links as much as possible unless you are creating anb article which will make them into a blue link. The reason is because redlinks are so f---ing annoying and they dont lead anywhere and makes the article look bad, so get rid of red links and avoid putting them up. And try not to go off page like you did with all those periods cause thats annoying too (in my opinion
Images:	0	Unfortuantly, i was dissapointed with the fact there where no images here. But hey its your first article so thats quite common. You may think that you dont need to have images on your articles, but images are what makes the article come to life, they make the page lest dull so you dont have to look at just black and white. So I encourage you to out up at least one, two, or more images. However, do not put up images like pornography or gore, shock images, as that is against the rules and you could be blocked for a while. It gives you a warning in the upload photo page: "Pornographic/shock/gore images which are clear copyright violations and/or which serve little satirical purpose WILL be deleted without warning. You may be blocked from uploading if you abuse the system." as for anything else feel free to use!
Miscellaneous:	1	My average score
Final Score:	7	This is your first article so its quite understandable. Just follow my advice, get someone elses opinion, and also read the beginners guide and HTBFANJS, which will help alot. I believe you have great potential, you need to work on it. Good luck and enjoy your stay here at Uncyclopedia.
Reviewer:	---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 22:49, November 10, 2009 (UTC)