Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/HowTo:Not Give A Shit
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HowTo:Not Give A Shit[edit source]
Hey, maybe you will give enough shit to want to review this. But if all you want to do is bash it, I don't give a shit about what you have to say. (ok, maybe I do. For the sake of making this article better.)
SaltyKid 13:52, September 26, 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | Some of the jokes could have been fleshed out and made funnier. For example, "Well then you must be dumber than a box of rocks" can be changed to "Well then you must be dumber than a {{Noun}}" so that it is always a random and different noun every time you read it. Also, fat cops are all too common. Why not something a little out of the ordinary, such as an Amish Heavy metal singer or an anorexic chef; maybe "just think {{Adj}} {{Noun}}" or something. |
| Concept: | 10 | I liked the concept of teaching people how to not give a shit, despite not giving a shit yourself. That's probably the artcle's strongest asset, in my opinion. It just needs a little bit better execution. |
| Prose and formatting: | 9 | The grammar is a bit rough in parts of the preamble. "You got" should be "You've got" if using present tense. You don't need to capitalize every word in the headlines; it's a little hard on the eyes. Also, it could use a few more links, maybe "your life sucks" should link to George W. Bush or Kevin Federline or Paris Hilton. |
| Images: | 6 | Some of the images don't really serve the article that well. Maybe replace Freddie Mercury (one of rock's great frontmen) with a really random picture (say, File:Winkler2.jpg or File:Ualuealualeualueale.gif or my own pics File:Poirot Kel.jpg and File:Kenan.jpg) or make your own over-the-top, don't-give-a-shit image using Photoshop, GIMP, or MS Paint if you must; I'd prefer GIMP since it's free and doesn't suck like MS Paint. The giraffe/graph was funny, but was also used in the Krusty Krab Training Video episode of Spongebob. It also could have used more images and more captains, maybe a funny one-liner -- those can easily make or break an image. |
| Miscellaneous: | 9 | The sections are too short and could be made a little bit longer. Make your not-giving-a-shit a little more elaborate and wordy to make sections longer and then when you get to "Will this article... really help me?" you can keep the short sections as is. |
| Final Score: | 41 | I didn't see any other problems with the article. It's a great article, it just needs a little improvement. You should start by reading HTBFANJS and Beginner's Guide again, and checking out Uncyclopedia:Best of for some inspiration. Good luck with it. |
| Reviewer: |  PF4Eva, the President of Imagination Vote for me My tax returns 16:52, September 26, 2009 (UTC)
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