Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/HowTo:Get Over Jenny (2nd Review)
HowTo:Get Over Jenny [edit source]
The last review was pretty brief, but I tried to do what it said. I lessened the dialogue that I thought was unnecessary and I added a brief See Also section. I still haven't been able to get more pictures (awaiting an image request response) so just rate the two that are there on how good they are, not the amount of pictures present.
Smokin' Cheddar BBQ: The King of the Triangular Snackfoods 19:40, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | This starts out really funny, like a 9. It fizzles toward the end for me, down to like a 5. So the average is 7.
The concept is great. Now, about that fizzling at the end - besides the story, which is funny, what is really strong about the beginning compared to the end is the subtle author intrusion. It's intriguing and subtle enough to hold me. I just personally felt like it got too strong going forward. I think the author needs to back off here and let the story tell itself. Insulting the character a little bit as the author is amusing - overdoing it somehow ruins it for me. At the very least give it a try and see if you don't like it better if the author gets off of his back so heavily. The story is great other than that. |
| Concept: | 9.5 | This is 9.5 simply because 10s should be really hard to come by. But there is no problem here for me - I love the concept, and the story. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | The language is very good. The links are nicely handled. I would be more sparing with the all caps. The sections are fine, I think. The presentation isn't extraordinary, but it's adequate. And the strength of this is the story and the concept. |
| Images: | 6 | The images you have are really good, the captions are great. The jail picture is wonderful. You do need more, as I think you have admitted. Scores are based against a finished product, of course, not on a conditional criteria. But don't get hung up on the score. The advice is the meat and pomegranate juice of a review. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7 | Averaged-ish |
| Final Score: | 35.5 | I was happy reading this. It is a great, funny concept. Nice job. I would yes vote this for VFH with a softening of the author insults and the yelling. I would abstain vote it as is. |
| Reviewer: | Globaltourniquet - (was TPLN) 17:35, 13 March 2009 (UTC) | |