Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Gun: The Game
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Gun: The Game[edit source]
| Humour: | 3 | Some of this was amusing, but it could use more prose, suspense, and the utterly rediculous might actually be funny here. Please lay off the gays thing. Something funnier than everyone bad being gay would help. Maybe the bad guys could be hairdressers, communists, atheists, Fox News Anchors, etc. More variety, more laughs! |
| Concept: | 3 | I don't understand the concept to much. Why is this a game? What this article is about could be better explained. Is this a story? If so, you may want UnBooks. I don't know much about UnBooks, but there are lots of people around that know more and are willing to help. Just ask questions. |
| Prose and formatting: | 3 | To be honest, I don't seee much prose really. Formatting could be more creative, which would make the page more reader friendly. The formatting could be fixed fairly easily, and portions could be reduced in length to make it more reader friendly. |
| Images: | 0 | Not one image to speak of. This is a problem, as funny images really help an article on Uncyclopedia. Try using google image search, just remember to make sure images youupload are not copyrighted. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | I give you 5 here, because maybe you were looking for Unbooks or UnScripts (if that is in fact what I think it is). This would definitely fit better there. Is this perhaps a type of play? |
| Final Score: | 14 | I would consider this to need a lot of work, but if you want to salvage it, you might want to ask for help from people. I'd help if you ask me at my talk page, but I'm kind of busy sometimes. I imagine you want to try fixing this, as that was a lot of writing, and we wouuldn't want iit to go to waste. |
| Reviewer: | -- Major'GUN' Ggarfield, Le Marquis de Nofu .Complex! 03:15, 3 December 2007 (UTC)
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Excuse me, but I don't want you to make fun of ANYONE on pee review. Give constructive criticism or bug off. • <-> (Dec 3) @ 14:01
Point taken, Cajek, and comments have been modified. I must have been overtierd before. Sorry. --Major'GUN' Ggarfield, Le Marquis de Nofu .Complex! 19:10, 3 December 2007 (UTC)