Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/G-Rex
G-Rex[edit source]
Just to mention that MadMax, whom I respect as much as you other writers, has already enjoyed this article, and has also edited it. So I'm hoping this can make it to VFH. I like the style as is, honestly, but rules say it must pass a Pee. So rules will be rules, and friends will be friends (remember Freddy? - he was everyones friend). Any way, it's no turning back now. AAAAHHHH H H H...!!!
Regarding a review, I don't plan on listening to anyone, nor changing a single word. So if you want to edit go right ahead. Otherwise don't Pee for GLEE! Cause I don't even want a Pee Review - which will simply be another writers version of paradise. Thanks all...
Funnybony 17:24, January 15, 2010 (UTC)
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This raptor is guarding this article while his master, Iwillkillyou333 is reviewing it. Be Careful! He Bites. |
| Humour: | 7 | There isn't much to talk about, but here it goes.
Ok, this isn’t a bad article and I had some good giggles. However I like to point out that much of your paragraphs are on the short side. Like some sections have no more than two sentences, and some have one. You have a good idea going, but you need more info on some of the sections. They don’t have to be too long but they should be longer than just two sentences. Also be careful with quotes, as people tend to get bitchy with quotes as they can be unfunny. Remember, only put up a quote if it is actually funny. And please get rid of that facts template, as I see no humor in using it. |
| Concept: | 8 | Not Bad. A concept about a dinosaur that is larger than life is a great idea. However, it would be better instead of stating it’s a fictional creature that was made up, you should make it appear real. |
| Prose and formatting: | 9 | your grammar and spelling are good, although I did find one mistake, but I fixed it. |
| Images: | 10 | Awesome images, although you should compare a G-rex compared to a human being. (which sounds stupid, cause they’re like freaking big) |
| Miscellaneous: | 8 | My overall grade of this article. |
| Final Score: | 42 | Nice article, good concept, short paragraphs, stupid template. That much sums it up. You are probably going to ignore this, but let me point out one thing; VFH can be a bitch. Even though one person would like it, others may not. I learned that the hard way myself. Remember, Pee review isn’t just for getting articles nominated for VFH, it is used to help you out, to point to your mistakes and give you tips to help make your article be good, and even help you to win VFH. If you fail at VFH, remember this review will help you fix your mistakes. You can also get someone else’s opinion, that helps too. Good Luck! |
| Reviewer: | -- Director WILL YOU 333 03:13, January 18, 2010 (UTC)
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