Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/ETWN Cancels the Adventures of Jesus, Fans outraged
UnNews:ETWN Cancels the Adventures of Jesus, Fans outraged[edit source]
Alexandros 17:16, 21 May 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | This was really good! What there was of it was definitely funny, except it was too short. You could explain that an emotionally crippled viewer suggested bringing the Jesus character back to life but, even after some consideration, this idea was thrown out as being too implausible. Something to twist the idea a little bit.
Expand into what Revelation is going to be about, tell us that not just the actor that plays jesus is going to be returning in this show but that most of the cast and crew are joining him there. Don’t just say that the reasons are unclear about why the shown was pulled, speculate about it. Is it a ploy to become one of those cultish TV shows with a large fan base of people ready to die for the cause. This’ll be excellent satire as it’s exactly what did happen with the stories of Jesus just now they’re modernised through TV. see if you can tell us what ETWN stands for, really try and make it funny. you could even say that there appears to be early stirring of a riot. things like this just to make it a bigger story. |
| Concept: | 8 | From what I can tell this is a pretty original idea. I don’t think we have many UnNewses reporting shows being cancelled and its quite a good concept you just need to exaggerate the distress people feel and make it really sound like a big story when it isn’t. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | Similar problems again except you forgot the location entirely. VATICAN CITY Italy I’m guessing is appropriate, even if it is an international issue (brilliant way of making it hyperbolically over the top incidentally) the station is based there. No links add some. Needs paragraphing. Quotes need to be italicised. Template still a bit redundant.
also needs expansion (suggested material in Humour section). |
| Images: | 4 | This sort of image is pretty common and the caption wasn’t excellent either. Why not try a still from the episode where Jesus is shooting up a prostitution ring or something out of the ordinary like that (considering that prostitutes never existed in biblical times). |
| Miscellaneous: | 6 | averaged |
| Final Score: | 30 | If you would like to ask/insult/thank me about anything please visit my talk page. |
| Reviewer: | Have Fun! MuCal. Orian57|Chat|Chuckle|PEE List|Awarded|UnBlog|  16:47, 22 May 2008 (UTC)
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