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Charles Lindbergh[edit source]
A resubmit of a rewrite I finished today, some of the differences include the new section on Germany as well as the bibliography at the end and a few extra jokes here and there. I think I was gonna get UU to review this one again for me, and odds are that he's going to whether I ask him to or not. ~Minitrue Sir SysRq! Talk! Sex! =/ GUN • WotM • RotM • AotM • VFH • SK • PEEING • HP • BFF (@ 01:19 Feb 23)
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A big mug o' reviewin' strength tea? Why, that must mean this article is being reviewed by: UU - natter  (While you're welcome to review it as well, you might like to consider helping someone else instead). (Also, if the review hasn't been finished within 24 hours of this tag appearing, feel free to remove it or clout UU athwart the ear'ole). |
The man guesses right. I will take a look at this some time over the weekend. When I'm not out getting my ass kicked on a soccer field and the like. Hey, I can talk American! My mom will be so proud! --SirU.U.Esq. VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 10:04, Feb 23
- Good job, you just forgot to put "fuck" somewhere in that sentence. But other than that, you're looking pretty American right now. (And for the record, I do call it football, but just to confuse my friends.) ~Minitrue Sir SysRq! Talk! Sex! =/ GUN • WotM • RotM • AotM • VFH • SK • PEEING • HP • BFF (@ 18:17 Feb 23)
| Humour: | 9 | Ah yes, a definite improvement. The extra section is a good one and a worthwhile addition, and some of the other tweaks really help it blossom. I think you took on board my last review and ran with it, as well as adding plenty of good new stuff, and I'm impressed by the results. |
| Concept: | 9 | The comments I made last time still hold true, I think. |
| Prose and formatting: | 9 | Well written, a good length, formatting's fine, no problems with spelling and so forth. One or two sentences felt a bit awkward, most notably "Despite the fact that Hauptmann was said to have worked alone when the ransom note left at the scene mentioned that there were several kidnappers, in a post-WWI America, the execution of any German was enough to satisfy the nosy public and allow them to all get back to their lives" - which I should have picked up on before. A small tweak there and you should be fine. |
| Images: | 8 | The same as last time, so the same score and comments stand. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.8 | Averaged. |
| Final Score: | 43.8 | Well done, a significant improvement, and definitely one of the better biographical articles we have. I'm wrestling with myself over whether to nom it - not because I'm not sure it deserves it, because I think it does, but because my track record with noms is slightly less than stellar. Still, on balance, I really do like this, so I'll give it a go and see what happens! |
| Reviewer: | --SirU.U.Esq. VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 10:14, Feb 24 | |