|Humour:||7||Pretty good stuff here. I often see people taking this kind of concept and just kind of ranting, but you haven't done that; you've managed to make it absurd enough that it ends up funny. For example in the history section, when you talk about how it was invented by the CIA and that, it's quite a bit off from anything that could be true. There are some bits though that it seems more like you could just be giving an accurate description of magazines, and I'm not entirely sure why you've pointed out the first two groups of people as most likely to buy magazines. Like the first sentence - it's kind of funny, but it almost reads like you've just described what magazines are. If I were writing this I might have gone a bit farther than you did with the idea that it was invented by the CIA - go into some detail about why they invented this and the effects it has, maybe say it was intended for mind control, maybe try to sound scientific rather than saying things like 'They ate this crap up'. You may have read about how cell phone towers are really mind control towers; Snarglefoop has a link to one of those websites on his user page, so you could try taking inspiration from that. Something about zombie-like people standing in front of magazine racks. The article doesn't really need any improvement, though, those are just suggestions if you want to make it really shiny.|
|Concept:||8||I like the concept you've chosen, as I've said under Humour, though it could possibly stand to be pointed up a bit more, as I've also said.|
|Prose and formatting:||9||No major issues here, the prose is fine (except for the sentence 'Recently, magazine creators thought of even another way to make money.' where the words 'even another' don't feel quite right to me - I'd probably say 'yet another' but that may be just me). The main quibble I have is that you've indented all the paragraphs, which isn't the end of the world but isn't standard either and looks a bit odd.|
|Images:||7||Images illustrate the article well, and the captions are somewhat funny.|
|Final Score:||38||This is quite a decent article, especially for the first time round, though to make it shinier than just ok there are some things you might want to do. Or you might not. This is also the first actually good article I've reviewed.|
|Reviewer:||– Llwy-ar-lawr (talk • contribs • logs) 03:47, 15 Apr 2014|
I wrote this when I was like 12. Jesus christ it's weird to go back and see this.
This wiki was such a big part of my 11, 12, 13ish year old life. And then I just... left? Idk. It's so surreal, memories and stuff are rushing back. God, I really thought I was edgy.
If you've stumbled upon this, reply! I might see it in a year or two /s
Honestly I don't hate it as much as I thought I would though. I mean yeah. It's childish, looking back on it. But it's... kinda fun? I don't hate it, which is surprising, for me.
but oh GOD do not touch my User Page. It's the most 12 year old shit I've ever read. I should know, I wrote it. Thanks~