User:Shabidoo/happymonkeycompetition/2015/Everyotherusernamewastaken Scores and comments

Happy Monkey Competition 2015

Results and scores for Everyotherusernamewastaken

From Sarah[edit | edit source]

Creativity	Humour	Originality	Total
8/10	6/10	7/10	21/30

I didn't laugh out loud, but i did think it was creative. Good thinking to have two references at once with one line! I liked the picture with the NOT a happy monkey caption. 'a stream of BRIGHT grey blood' was funny, and the previously pink blood ever since the super glue was a great idea. I also liked the Parisian law student thing. Good article!

From GrammarFegelein[edit | edit source]

Creativity	Humour	Originality	Total
7/10	5/10	7/10	19/30

There were only a couple of funny lines and the ending was weak. I did like how the article revolved around one line taken literally which is creative and I also liked the monkey picture. Review done. 07:40, 5 August 2015 (UTC)

From Shabidoo[edit | edit source]

Creativity	Humour	Originality	Total
10/10	8.5/10	9.5/10	27/30

Extremely good mix of crude humour with poetic language. Nice idea incorporating you own ignorance of the show and its meaning into the narrative of the article.

Very well times and sparring funny lines not to mention extremely original:

"Oh," I crooned out, "Madrida!".
only my diaphragm would not contract as I was being pelted so damn hard in a sexual way.
yelling "AAAAAAARGH!" like a brain-damaged primate (especially funny)
her beautiful hairy back

I couldn't quite put my finger on the precise chromatic change that had occurred (not sure why this is funny...but it is funny).
I got back to my surprisingly large apartment in the suburbs.

I kept loads of lesbians hanging about the place because I was politically correct
I had not considered up until this point that Madrida's oral ejaculation was to be taken literally.

Jack had gone away to wherever it is lesbians go
so I presumed he was a Parisian law student. (marvelous line)

The images are also truly surreal with funny captions.

Towards the end, I found it to be a bit of overkill ( Unfortunately Myriad was not with them, but I had bad enough memories of Randolph, the big evil drug kingpin). Just one dubious character too much. Also the decapitation (perhaps he died by you performing a botched tracheotomy). The ending is so wonky and bad...that its great.

Over all I am astounded by the creativity (the good kind) the originality (the good kind) while being funny (quite a bit). Truly meets the spirit of the competition and very hard stuff to pull off in 48 hours. Rock and roll EOUWT! ShabiDOO 14:53, 3 August 2015 (UTC)

From THS[edit | edit source]

Score
6/10

I know I was told that I don't have to leave a comment, but I felt the dialogue was a little confusing, the ending was a bit of a letdown, and there weren't many laughs. (Though admittedly when there were laughs, they were pretty big ones.) Maybe just a matter of preference, though. ~[t h s] UotM 17:12, 08/03/2015