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senor penguito

Welch 11:33, 3 April 2008 (UTC)

PrIP'd! Pee Review In Progress Checkit bitches, this review is as good as peed on. I'm marking my effing territory. Said article is being reviewed by: ~Minitrue Sir SysRq! Talk! Sex! =/ GUN • WotM • RotM • AotM • VFH • SK • PEEING • HP • BFF

Humour:	2	Oi. This article is almost completely devoid of any brand of humor other than that of random. Random (or randumb as I prefer to call it) humor is not welcome on this site. We like to take pride in our work by never resorting to pointless, meaningless drivel. And that's what this is. I'm surprised that I'm giving you any points at all. You had one redeemable joke in here, however. Your bit about "...when I tried to apply to an art college in Germany they mocked my work, calling it boxy and blocky. So i swore revenge and killed millions of people who might have had a connection to the college." was a little closer to satire than the rest of the article. This tells me you have potential to write better articles. In the future, please try to be satirical instead of random. I hope this review doesn't discourage you from writing, rather I hope it clarifies what kind of material we're looking for. Read up on HTBFANJS and I'm sure you'll be writing gold in no time.
Concept:	1	I can't identify any sort of concept here. To be honest, this looks just like all of the other articles I see down at VFH. Essentially, it's a narration of some penguin that not even Codeine's mum has heard of. While I doubt that there really is such a penguin, not to mention that you might know/be related to/go to school with said penguin, it still technically violates our vanity policies per Codeine's mum. You get a one in this section because this is completely random; tell me how many hits you get when you punch "senor penguito" into Google.
Prose and formatting:	2	Let's start with the header. I don't understand why you have that color and font instead of the default. Usually, people only mess with the font when there's a real need for it. There are a number of other formatting "don'ts" throughout the article that need fixing. Plus, you have a plethora of spelling mistakes and grammatical errors. In short, don't think about taking that proofreading tag off anytime soon.
Images:	3	The one image you have isn't too terrible. But it's not great. It contributes nothing to the article and isn't particularly funny. For an article of this length, I would say at least two images would be appropriate, with at least one of them being chopped. Perhaps you could get a screenshot from March of the Penguins and have a caption such as "Penguito (left) from his acting days." It's up to you, I would expect you to come up with something much more original.
Miscellaneous:	2	Avg'd.
Final Score:	10	Overall, this is a prime candidate for VFD, unfortunately. The article makes no sense, bears no relevance, and, to use some old-timey language on you, has no redeeming value. You need to read over the humor guide before writing another article. In the meantime, I think you should move this to your userspace before it gets deleted. And yes, an article like this is at risk of being deleted on sight. Please contact me if you need help moving this to your userspace, or if you need help with anything else.
Reviewer:	~Minitrue Sir SysRq! Talk! Sex! =/ GUN • WotM • RotM • AotM • VFH • SK • PEEING • HP • BFF @ 17:38 Apr 5