Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Why?:Does Christopher Meloni not have an emmy yet? version 2.5
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Why?:Does Christopher Meloni not have an emmy yet?[edit source]
This is my 2 1/2 time entering this into Pee Review please tell me what you think and give as many suggestions as possible please.--Dr. Fenwick 20:52, 27 November 2007 (UTC)
Humour: | 7.25 | average of all sections
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Concept: | 9 | i really liked the concept, and i don't even watch law & order. |
Prose and formatting: | 6 | it seems you overuse 'Christopher Merloni'. try going with 'Merloni' or just 'he' a few times, to make it flow. the 'i know what you did last summer' movie should have all of its words capitalized. maybe more of an encyclopedic tone would work better, rather than saying things like 'us here at uncyclopedia'. this is particularly true in the last section. there are grammatical, spelling, and formatting mistakes here and there, see final comments. |
Images: | 8.34 | average of all images
i recommend moving the mariska image up to the conspiracy theories part, and the seinfeld one down to the reaction part, since that is the point in the article where he actually abuses seinfeld. |
Miscellaneous: | 10 | since i thoroughly enjoyed this article, after expecting to not like it at all before i read it, i award you the maximum number of miscellany points. congratulations. |
Final Score: | 40.59 | you've got a good article here, and i see it's on VFH with 11 votes as of this writing. i'd be tempted to vote for, provided some of the suggestions i have suggested are followed (i like to think i'm helpful like that). i would myself fix up things like grammar and spelling for you, but i am very hesitant to edit in any way an article that is on VFH. if you'd like, i could help you out with getting this one featured. i could do a grammar/spelling edit, and then a general edit with some changes that you could revert at your leisure. if you don't mind my editing/meddling, you can let me know on my talk page, and i'll comply as promptly as possible. keep up the good work, and good luck on a highlight. |
Reviewer: | -- 23:36, 7 December 2007 (UTC) |