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RunEscape[edit source]
I created this a while back, and was told to get it peer reviewed if I wanted it moved to mainspace; an opinion on whether it's worthy of mainspace would be appreciated. This is probably best reviewed by someone who knows RuneScape.
The House of Pigs everyone hates me... 18:42, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
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Tagstit doesn't believe in new fancy-pancy toilet systems with running water and all. Just a hole in the ground with a lil' cover will do. Now gimme' your article and I'll be done in a few minutes.
While you are welcome to review this, I suggest you find another article in need of help so that we can clear the ever growing Pee Request list. |
| Humour: | 4 | Alright I have a single major problem with each of your points here and it would greatly help if you changed them before continuing on. First though, know that I have little knowledge of Runescape, and but I feel that a view of someone unfamiliar is just as important. My major problem with the humor, is that you keep it very injokey at parts. For example, the part about the Runescape one or classic or whatever never existing was REALLY dragged out and I really didn't think it was that funny. I think it is important to make things on this site understandable to everyone, especailly major jokes. So maybe an explanation beforehand would help, or mention a bit more subtly, so that it doesn't bore the people who are unaware, but gives a chuckle to those who do know. Am I making sense? I DO think you hit a few good points, like the sex stuff and police force stuff, but that leads me into my concept. |
| Concept: | 5 | You definitely could have done more with this. what your problem here is, is that it is a simple explanation. You spend half the article talking about it's development, and to tell you the truth, that isn't all that great. I would consider shortening that, and looking into other ways of making fun of the game. BUT a better idea, is to do something COMPLETELY new. What I mean by this, is instead of doing an explanation of the game, talk about it like it is a real working economic and social world. It is hard to explain, but you could talk about it more dramatically. Like it is just there, no one controls it, and fake characters interact with each other and develop. You could include finding jobs, cooking, and even crazy sex scandals or whatever you want to call it. Just something to think about I guess... |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | A but sloppy in some areas, mainly the beginning, but overall decent. It is a bit dull to read and a few more pictures might break that up so it is easier to read. Also, make more sections instead of bold sections. You should cut the part about development dramatically, and flesh out content. |
| Images: | 3 | There is really only one...well, two if you count the one at the top, but that is just a titlish thing. I would consider adding one or two more. Also, the ones you have aren't really funny. You should add some funny ingame pictures, because I can see those being pretty funny. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | Averaged |
| Final Score: | 24 | Decent, I think it is boring in some areas and some areas you hit it right. You definitely need to cut the development part and add to the content, maybe put a fresh spin on things and you will be sitting pretty! We need a Runescape page on here, but be prepared for it to be edited mercilessly by random IP addresses. If you have any questions feel free to ask me on my talk page! Good luck! |
| Reviewer: | ~SirTagstit • VFH • NotM • PEEING • CPT • RotM • BFF 07:00, 24 February 2009 (UTC) | |