Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnPoetia:Hobbits Are Not Gay

Request created on behalf of Mr.Soot Gremlin -Talk

Cheers. ~

04:41, 29 January 2011

Meaning that Mr.Soot Gremlin

-Talk wrote it of course. --

02:45, January 30, 2011 (UTC)

-Talk 21:11, January 31, 2011 (UTC)

I PRIP'ed this, but I got too busy to do it right now. Maybe later... maybe someone else? pillow talk 19:07, February 11, 2011 (UTC)

Humour:	6.5	This article's amusing, but not exactly hilarious. You have a good idea when you try to point out certain 'gay' behaviors in Hobbits, only to deny their implications later. However, there aren't enough jokes in the poem, and it ends fairly quickly. I'd suggest you come up with more examples of gay behavior in Hobbits, while persistently repeating that they are not gay. The whole "sorry to disappoint you" tone would really help improving this article
Concept:	7	Like I said, a nice concept, but you can only go so far in writing a poem based on it. I doubt if this article can ever reach Feature quality, if that's what your intention was.
Prose and formatting:	8	The rhyme flow is pretty good, although the chorus "Hobbits are not gay...they simply act that way." repeats itself a bit too often. Remove it from some places, you don't need to say it all the time.
Images:	7	Just one image, showing hobbits embracing each other at what seems to be a party. If you can find any other images relevant to the theme of the poem, you should add them.
Miscellaneous:	7	My gut feeling
Final Score:	35.5	Overall, a well written and amusing article, but it's unlikely to make it to the Best Of category. Still, adding a few more examples of gay behavior and more images to illustrate the same could add to the humor.
Reviewer:	--Scofield 13:10, February 12, 2011 (UTC)

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