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The Sound of Music

SaintJayJay 21:16, February 17, 2011 (UTC)

I'll get this done within the next 24 hours---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 04:50, February 18, 2011 (UTC)

Ran out of time, but I will finish it soon---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 09:27, February 19, 2011 (UTC)

Almost done---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 01:26, February 20, 2011 (UTC)

Humour:	6	While you did do a good job at humorizing the article, there are a couple of thongs I would advise fixing up. Let's try to tone it down on the sex, rape, and stuff like that, as not everybody thinks that's funny and rather finds them annoying. I prefer that you reference them indirectly via links or clever use of words, (ex. fun time in bed. That would make them more humorous than if they were used directly. Also, the sentence, "These musicals, particularly The Sound of Music, are mostly popular amongst homosexual males and single women in their late twenties upwards" sounds more like bashing musicals in general. It would be funny for the musical being described in the article, but don' right bash them, as people do dislike that someimes. In the character section, you should should elaborate more on the nuns. You don't have to put too much detail, but just enough to expand it a little more, as it is currently just there with hardly any purpose. Perhaps you should also include stuff like "Reception" and "Meaning of Songs". These are soley up to you, but they aare good ideas nevertheless.
Concept:	8	An article based off a movie; very original. They you executed it was brilliant. While it does have a few things that needs to be done, it's pretty good concept wise.
Prose and formatting:	7	I'm giving you a seven for one reason: you tend to break the tone. Sentences such as "Suspicious indeed" and "Very lazy song writing" changes the tone from third person to first, something that maney Uncyclodepians advise against. When you pick a tone, you must stick with it throughout the article; unless it involves a circumstance that would deem it necessary (ask me on my talk page for a better explanation. Other than that looks pretty good in spelling and grammar.
Images:	8	While the images are just plain, they do support your article well, and captions also support them. Perhaps one or two more wouldn't hurt, but I think you're good on images.
Miscellaneous:	7.3	My average grade of this article.
Final Score:	36.3	Other than the few mistakes I've mentioned above, I personally enjoyed it; it was very interesting indeed. Keep working on it, and it should be better than ever. Feel free to ask me any questions you have on my talk page.
Reviewer:	---   TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 04:13, February 20, 2011 (UTC)