Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Polish Inquisition (second opinion)
Polish Inquisition[edit source]
Got an excellent review from MrN9000, but I'd like another opinion to see if the jokes actually passes through correctly. Any takers? ~ Mordillo where is my ASSHAT? 14:39, 15 January 2008 (UTC)
| Polish Inquisition is being reviewed by Your Source for Fine Scented Pee And Whatever Else Comes Out Of Him |
As promised! • <-> Jan 15 (15:51)
| Humour: | 6.4 | avg of each sectiones... that's spanish.
I don't know what's going on, but it is funny!
A little bit on the random side. Let me guess: are you Polish? 'cuz I don't really understand what's going on here.
Well, now you are taking me deeper into your randomness. Seeing some grammar errors a la "This title later became the later official title of office for the chief inquisitors". I mean, I get that they use guilt to secure their country, which is a hilarious idea, but I just don't understand what it has to do with poland. If this was "The Jewish Grandmother Inquisition" I wouldn't be distracted by trying to find the connection.
Pretty good, except... why Poland? I don't know why I'm hung up on that, but I am. Why Poland?
Maybe I'm just teh stuhpids, but I didn't understand that section. Accounting = staying home? huh?
Higher than average score because you didn't talk about freaking Poland! Some corrections: Jadek Always plans ahead and buy a two way ticket BUY should be BUYS, Jadek always come for the weekend and brings flowers as well COME FOR THE WEEKEND should be COMES HOME ON WEEKENDS (I think).
It's a funny list, but it's still just a list. Stretch it out is the only advice I can give.
I don't think you need this section, Mordillo. It doesn't add anything. |
| Concept: | 7 | Yes, I like this idea, but why Poland? Is Poland known for being guilty? I don't get that part of it. Luckily, that's an easy fix if you feel up to it: just replace Poland with a more widely known stereotype or if you want to stick with the Poland thing, you have to go into way more detail and less randomness (like in sections 1 and 2.0). For example, who the hell is Jadek? Why did you choose that name instead of just using the phrase "my son/daughter" or something? I guess I could sum this up by saying that it has too much Polishness in it? I don't know. I'm American, so foreign things frighten me. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | Weird grammar problems that I covered in the humor section. |
| Images: | 8 | Above average pictures, I think. Obviously one of them was photoshopped. Nice. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6.9 | {{Guilt|6.4|7|6|8}}
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| Final Score: | 34.3 | Relatively short article plus already being somewhat clever, so this review isn't as in-depth as my others have been. I'm glad you wanted my "services" Mordillo! Call me any time! |
| Reviewer: | • <-> Jan 15 (16:28) | |
- /me sticks my oar in - hope you don't mind. I liked it, think I spotted the point - those pesky Polish Jewish grandmothers, yes? I have encountered tales of the species from a Jewish friend. However as per Cajek's review, I think it's a little subtle on that point for people who are unaware of the breed. Perhaps something about the recruitment process to the inquisition? Famed for its ruthless standards etc etc? Just a thought.
And I suspect that the sentence structure Cajek highlights as an error is in fact intentional, isn't it? Always you write me the nice article! --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 16:56, 15 January 2008 (UTC)